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Wednesday, August 26, 2009

55 Fiction - #7


Well friends, am here again with another 55 Fiction! Am so happy that people like my 55 fiction and as my friends commented, my comments are sky rocketing! This post is also special for me as my Followers increased from 5 (before 15days) to 25!! My comments also increased to 550+ and my visitors count reached 660+..

I must thank everyone, each one of you personally for making my blog a successful one! This is my first venture in penning articles!



55 Fiction is a form of micro fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.Most 55 Fiction works are dramatized so as to get the effect in limited time.

Here comes my 55 Fiction.....


The phone rang...

"Akhil here.."

"Am Rita! Akhil, I enjoy this awesome climate by lying in my bed. Am flying in clouds, I'm extremely happy..."

"Rita, Listen...."

"Naah Akhil, am sensing all these amidst combating those Red Demons.."

CLICK!

He dialed....

"Rita, hear....."

"......"

"Rita please hear me...."

A still voice replied, "Rita passed away doctor!"


I Solemnly dedicate this article for persons who died in Cancer and the families who lost their dear ones!!

P.S : Many told me to write this in a paragraph. But I wrote this one again in the same manner because its in a conversation format!

Hope you liked this one.. Please do comment on this 55 fiction attempt of mine..


With Love,







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69 comments:

Arnav said...

Nice.. well written .. there are some experiences in life.. which have no reason and no logic to explain..



Keep Writing and smiling

Shruti said...

@arnav
you are right!!
Same feeling i had when i was writing this post!

Keep smiling!

Kaka said...

this one was pretty good shruti....:)...more that that it was ur dedication that i liked...:)

HaRy!! said...

oooo cancer!! i hate that word :( my grandma died out of cancer and those memories can never drain out!! and senorita...as usual kalitinga poonga:)... epadi nga ungalala ipadi elutha mudiyuthu...:)..cya around

VeNkY said...

@ shruthi

hey shruthi this is similiar to Delhi 6. Were you watching delhi 6 before you wrote it.

Musings of a lonely traveler said...

Shruti!
It was so touching and you managed to do this time with the bad disease, cancer. Co-incidentally, the book I purchased two days back is "Just Little Run Around the World" - a true story of a wife running around the world in memory of her husband (who died in 2002 of Prostate Cancer) to create cancer awareness. I recommend you to read this book, as you will understand how God had made certain people who are too beautiful at their hearts.

Shruti! no wonder that you receive such unlimited number of visitors; you deserve this :)

Bharathi said...

Good one. I liked it. After reading the last line I read the whole story again.
Your blog reflects your innocence which everyone will like. I am sure your blog will get more and more popular day by day. All the best. By the way am I the first or second follower?

kasabiangirl said...

Nice Shruti..like the post!

Congrats and hope you keep getting more followers everyday :)

dmanji said...

Cancer is a dreaded word !!!! A sad one left me little sad :( but thats Ok ...
you are becoming a SEO guru I mean attracting so many visitors so easily GR8

Amit414@IT-BHU said...

Hi Shruti.. :)

very good one.. :)

really touched my heart...

cheers!!!

pawan said...

A clean post, but it has stark similarities with "The Jacob's Ladder", a movie which amplifies excellence!

A good try and a great output!
Cheers!

Shankar said...

hey congrats for all the above u mentioned...

but i didn't really understand this 55...

I just realized after reading last two lines that...it was dedicated to cancer patients...

Bharathi said...

@ Shankar: she (her spirit) made the call after she was dead.

Shankar said...

spirit......??? hmmm....fine....

shruthi..did u watch any horror show last night?? ha..ha.... lol.. just kidding..i read it again... its nice...thanks bharathi..for explanation..thanks a lot...

Shruti said...

@kaka
hey thank you so much yaar!!

Shruti said...

@hary
oye! I know the real pain when someone suffer from the loss of their dear ones!!
yennala mattum yepdi mudiyuthaa??
idhu ungalukke konjam over ah therila?! I am writing just like other fellow bloggers!! :P

Anyways glad that you are visiting and appreciating my posts!!

Shruti said...

@venky
hey too much ah pesaraye!!
i dint watch delhi-6 still!! So its my own creation!!

Shruti said...

@mohammed
thank you so much anna..
Yaa i too heard about that book! Even am thinking of reading it!!

Thanks for your wishes :)

Shruti said...

@Bharathi
thank you so much! Am flattered completely!! I dunno whether i have that 'innocence'! After you told, i started analyzing myself!!
btw,you are my second follower!!

Shruti said...

@kasabian girl
glad that you liked this post!

thanks for your wishes!

Shruti said...

@dmanji
its not only a dreaded word, its a dreaded disease!!

Thanks for those comments :)

Shruti said...

@amit
thanks for the visit!!
Even i felt so much while writing this!

Shruti said...

@pawan
i din't have "The Jacob's Ladder" thoughts while writing this!!

Am elated after knowing the output is good!

Shruti said...

@shankar and bharathi
am really sorry for not making the story clear!
Its not a spirit yaar!!

Its just the last words of the dying girl..
Red demons refer to the Blood cancer- Leukemia..
She calls the doctor who happened to be her friend the feelings she has, while on her death-bed !

From next time i ll be more clear

Sid 'Ravan' Kabe said...

oh...
pardon me...i did not understand...from where was she calling??? :o

Sid 'Ravan' Kabe said...

hey understood...:D

Shruti said...

@SiD
U are really buddhu!!

Rane (The Orchid with All Shades Pink) said...

you touched me.. very well written...


Rane

Shruti said...

@rane!
Thank you re!

VeNkY said...

@shruthi

copyrights untha hehhehe. Jusy kidding

Bharathi said...

LOL. you spoiled my happiness. For once I thought I got the story line correct. sorry Shankar for misleading.

Srividya said...

romba touching....,keep rocking:)

Sat_hi_sh said...

beautifully expressed post :)
glad am following some good blogs :)

Indian Pundit said...

Beautiful one.

Sad but nice. Cheers

Shruti said...

@venky
aarambichutaya!!
too much ah pesareye!!!

Shruti said...

@bharathi
lolzz to you too!!
But how home this made to think of spirits?

Shruti said...

@srividya
touching ah??
:P
thanks di

Shruti said...

@satish
thank you so much yaar!!

Shruti said...

@IP
thank you!

Bharathi said...

I linked up flying in clowds and red demons and thought she's dead and speaking from on the way to heaven or hell :-). Thinking too much ah. Any way dont you think this is a good plot for you to write a 55 fix. A person calling another from death bed. but later the receiver found that the call was made after she died. :D

Prads said...

nice da super ....
nice way of thinking
Regards,
Prasee

savitha said...

It was very emotional. don have words to say more than tat.. Good work

Shruti said...

@prasee
thanks!

Shruti said...

@bharathi!!
You started thinking so much these days!
Results of self-analysis huh!!
why don't you try writing a fictitious 55 fiction?!

Shruti said...

@savitha
thank you so much for the visit!

Glad that you liked it!

evanescentthoughts said...

Thanks girl for visiting my blog :) You have a nice blog here.. This story was so touching.. Will read more articles now..

Archana said...

Cancer is downright scary. And just hearing incidents about it shakes me. Even if it's someone totally unrelated to me. :/

Bharathi said...

I will try if I get some interesting plot. Tks

Shruti said...

@ashwini
Welcome to my space!!
thanks for those encouraging words!

Shruti said...

@archana
Its a dreaded disease yaar!! That's why we feel a lump in our throat when we hear that!

Shruti said...

@Bharathi!
All the best :)

Anu...:) said...

Hello!
Am new to your blog...and I must say you are an awesome writer! :)
Keep writing! :)

Shruti said...

Hi anu
welcome to my space!!
Thanks for calling me as an "Awesome writer"
Am just in a beginning stage and lots to learn!
Am happy to see you here!!
Keep visiting

Shas said...

A moving post.
Congrats! comments are raining and you are getting hounded by followers....lolzz.

Shruti said...

@shas
:-P
you are exactly right!!
Thanks for dropping by!

Bharat Pantula said...

the whole point of it lies in the fact that how you unknowingly erase the virtual diluting it into the reality...
Really, gorgeous...

Shruti said...

@Bharat
welcome to my space
thanks for your valuble comments!

RAM said...

Hey really touching one yaar. You have got a very neat narration skills.Keep going :)

Shruti said...

@ram
thank you so much for visiting

pra said...

Good one! Even I thought that she called after she died! but your idea is way better :-)

Shruti said...

@Pra
hey thanks yaar!! Thanks.. Hope my Idea paid off.

Benny said...

hey super ah iruku..I wrote the same subj in my last post in 555 words..u wrote in 55 words.. ;) short n sweet!Btw,first time here!! nice template n intersting posts!! wil keep following..cheers :)

Shruti said...

@benny
Glad that you visited this one!! Thank you so much yaar!!!

Sumeet.Shah said...

Gud one!!!!!

Sorry for being away for few days.... have got busy with my prfessional comitmnts..

though have managd to post new blg.. check it

cheers
SUmeet

Shruti said...

hey sumeet!!
Welcome back!!
Yep! SUre will check it!

Ekam said...

That was very well written Shruti :)

Shruti said...

@ekam
welcome to my blog!!
Thank you so much!!

balasrini said...

Gud one Shruti!!!

And hats off to the cause u dedicated this post too!

I know that ur dedication is from your heart, but not just from mind...

Shruti said...

@Bala
Thank u so much! This thanks comes from my heart!

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