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Tuesday, October 13, 2009

NEW DAWN


Hey guys thanks a ton for a clean, good review about my posts! Know what? This post has been selected by Blogadda as a Tangy Tuesday Pick. Yippee!! Am jumping in joy. Click here to read that post.

CAUTION : LONG STORY AHEAD!

TODAY, OCTOBER 12 2009:

Jhanvi looked straightly into his eyes and uttered, "Life doesn't treat everyone likely. We are bound to get hurt and relieved later on. I know how to take care of myself and am not a coward to kill myself. All the best and get on with your life Venkat". Jhanvi uttered these and started walking away from Venkat without expecting a reply from him. A silent tear escaped Venkat's eyes and he stood there looking on her foot steps..

APRIL 17 2009:

"The project starts from tomorrow and all you guys are from Mainframe. So working on the same domain will make your work easier. I expect fullest cooperation from you all". The team leader was proposing to a group of 10 about the new project they were allotted. Everyone was nodding yes except for a single girl among the group. It was Kajal. She was smiling herself and her hands were playing with her dhupatta. Jhanvi noticed Kajal's activities and smiled to herself and murmured 'Ahhhh.. This girl is smitten by cupid'. Jhanvi a year older than Kajal, are colleagues, room mates which has transformed itself into thick bond of friendship.

Kajal felt some chemical reactions inside her from the moment Krishna proposed her. In the beginning she thought it was mere mutual attraction. But after the transfer from Chennai to Banglore, she missed Krishna so much. But it was yesterday that she knew that Krishna got a transfer to Banglore. She was muttering, 'Krishna, had I known before that you love me so much, I would not have made you wait for so many days. Love you Krishna'. Suddenly Kajal got alerted by the shadow nearing her. She lifted her face and saw Jhanvi looking questioningly and winking. Her rose powdered cheeks went red by blushing and she covered her face out of shy. Jhanvi came near her, removed her hands, "Haan, what am I seeing now? This pretty damsel is blushing! Who is that lucky chap?". Kajal was shocked to hear this direct question. She adjusted herself and told, "K...K....Kri....". Jhanvi interrupted her and asked, "What? Kri? Is that a name". Kajal Smiled and shot back, "Naah, listen fully.. His name is Krishna. That's how everyone calls him". Jhanvi replied, "mmmm.. I thought you as a Kido but you are loving someone..good good..". Kajal, for the first time this evening thought of speaking back herself without answering to Kajal. "Ahhhh... You are not only my senior in office but also in love. We are beginners. But you and Venkat are the most experienced". Kajal winked at Jhanvi. Jhanvi could not help blushing on listening to Kajal's words. "Leave it Kajal. Welcome to the bandwagon. Now come, I will brief you about the meeting in Cafeteria. I know Krishna didn't allow you to listen to TL".

JUNE 31 2009:

"Jhanvi, come lets go and have our lunch..", said Kajal. Jhanvi was imbibed into her works so much that mostly she will forget her lunches. After Kajal came into her life, she ate regular food. Also, they made it a habit to speak about the man in their lives during that lunch. Jhanvi and Venkat love each other for more than a year now. Jhanvi never gets time for a movie or a day out with him. Both of them had hectic works. Jhanvi had weekend IMS classes for her upcoming CAT exams and it had been 4 months since they have seen each other. Late night conversations have become their routine. Jhanvi felt a big gap developing between them. She thought,'What Jaanu, don't you know why Venkat came to Banglore? He came just for you.How can you suspect his love?'. Both Kajal and Krishna were busy like the other couple. But the difference was, they made time for each other in their busy schedule. Krishna made it a habit of spending weekends with Kajal. Kajal told everything about Krishna, their love, the way he moves with her, first kiss, first night show, first hug. She never hid anything from Jhanvi. But on the other hand, Jhanvi wished to tell such things to Kajal as well. But nothing was in place for her except for those kisses she receives through phone.

SEPTEMBER 16 2009

Kajal came to office searching for Jhanvi. She finds her near the window gazing at the sky. Kajal approached her and asked "Jaanu yesterday I thought of introducing you to Krishna. He was waiting outside our place. Even I tried reaching your mobile. But I couldn't reach you. Jaanu.. Reply something". She continued, "Jaanu, what happened? Something wrong?". Kajal saw Jhanvi's blood-shot face with bulged eyes. Jhanvi's eyes moistened before she could open her mouth. She bit her lips hardly to control her emotions. But her reflexes were not listening. Blood trickled from the lips out of the pressure from her teeth. She told Kajal, "M...Maa...Mom got admitted in hospital. She had breathing problems last night it seems. Dad informed me. I went to ISCON and by the time I came to our place warden didn't allow me. I went to my uncle's home and came to office soon.". Kajal hugged Jhanvi and told, "Jaanu...Nothing will happen to mom until we all are with you. Come we shall speak with TL". Jhanvi told blankly, "He didn't approve my leave request"

SEPTEMBER 19 2009

Kajal came to Jhanvi's Cubicle and told, "I told my parents about Krishna and they loved him the moment they saw him. We are getting engaged next month. October 5th. It's like a dream coming true. Hey you are our senior and didn't you tell your parents?". Jhanvi replied, "We have to. But these days Venkat don't even have time to speak with me. He got busy. I avoided him the moment when he longed for my company. Once my mom gets well..... will she ever get well?". Kajal couldn't withstand her friend's problems. Jhanvi loved Venkat, but she is a sort of girl who doesn't know how to express her love. She is unlike Kajal. Jhanvi is stiff, adamant, ambitious, courageous, brilliant girl. Though Venkat and Jhanvi loved each other, they didn't spend quality hours for developing it. She got herself busy with office works.

SEPTEMBER 27 2009

"Jaanu, am very happy.. Am getting engaged to the man I loved. You should be dressing me up". Jhanvi smiled wryly and replied, "Without me, how will you get engaged?". Jhanvi picked up her ringing mobile. The moment she picked up the call, her face got drained out of blood and she came down with a thud. Mobile fell out of her hand, Kajal caught it half way and continued the conversation. "H...e..ll..oooo.. Am Kajal, Jhanvi's friend. What happened?". The voice on the other end replied, "Her mom had a cardiac arrest this morning and reached lord's abode". Kajal went numb on hearing that. She went along with Jhanvi and came back to her engagement.

OCTOBER 10 2009

Jhanvi came back to office after attending her mom's final rites. Kajal came forward, hugged her and tried to cheer her up. Jhanvi didn't want to upset her best friend. She made herself look normal and started enquiring about her engagement. Kajal blushed and took out the album from the bag. The first page read,

BETROTHAL OF VENKAT KRISHNA & KAJAL MENON

Jhanvi pointed to the name and raised her eye brows. Kajal promptly replied, "It seems his full name is Venkat Krishna."

The day Venkat proposed Jhanvi he told, "Jaanu, everyone calls me with my Last name. So I want you to call me as Venkat and not as Krishna. You should be differentiated among others".

Jhanvi sensed something wrong and opened the album. The guy who was standing next to Kajal was Her man, the man of her dreams. The one who came behind her, a year before. She felt a lump in her throat and it went dry. She wanted to cry out loud and scream,'Why the hell he betrayed me?'. But Kajal was standing next to her. 'She should be happy at least'. Jhanvi smiled, and gave back the album and wished her.

OCTOBER 11 2009
CONFLICTS OF HEART AND BRAIN:

H : 'I loved my mom so much. She left me half way and left. Then it was Venkat. How much I loved him? Where things went wrong? IMS? It seems he came to Banglore for Kajal and not me. He had been cheating me from the very beginning. How dumb I have been? How can I think of another life?'

B :'Jaanu, you are sounding filmy style. What if this guy ditched you? You are brave. Go, tell him how brave youcool-cartoon-29459 are and make him understand that he lost a precious jewel'

H : 'But I still love him. Kajal is my best friend and I may happen to see him frequently. I will give away my stubbornness'

B : 'I thought you had an ambition. Think of dad and mom. How much they have toiled to bring you up?'

H : 'But Venkat's betrayal will occupy my mind always. I can't live anymore'

She cried a lot like a child. She decided. She went to sleep expecting a new dawn by hugging her mom's photo.

TODAY, OCTOBER 12 2009:

She met Venkat at ISCON temple and spoke her heart. He listened everything and told, "I couldn't stop loving you Jaanu. I love you both. When you were out of my life citing IMS as reason, I happened to see Kajal and was attracted by her beauty and I started loving....". Jhanvi shouted, "Stop it for God's sake. You are so sick. You cheated me Venkat. How can you Love both of us? Don't do the same to Kajal. She will die that instant.". Venkat feared after hearing the word DEATH. He told, "Am sorry for hurting you Jaanu, don't come to wrong decision. Live your life". Jhanvi stared at him and her face flushed with rage. Venkat thought to himself, 'Wish my mind had not leapt for Kajal. Bravo Jhanvi. She can live without me. But can Kajal?'

Jhanvi looked straightly into his eyes and uttered,"Life don't treat everyone likely. We are bound to get hurt and relieved later on. I know how to take care of myself and am not a coward to kill myself. All the best and get on with your life Venkat". Jhanvi uttered these and started walking away from Venkat without expecting a reply from him. A silent tear escaped Venkat's eyes and he stood there looking on her foot steps.

sunset

A NEW DAWN dawned for Jhanvi...

With Love,

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65 comments:

Shankar said...

Nice one... the venkat krishna twist was good.....

but regarding the story I am not sure about whether its janvi's mistake or venkat's mistake...

Shruti said...

@Shankar
Hey thanks da :)
MISTAKES are mutual.. Both did mistakes..

Sat_hi_sh said...

hey gr8 story pa ,supera iruku :)
loved it :)
Jaanu shud have told abt Venkat to Kajal coz these kinda cheats never learn their lesson.....


anyways i hope that may be there's a Part2 of this story :)


keep blogging
cheers!!!

RSV said...

it was venkat's aka krishna's mistake...
How dare he...I mean. he was playing a double game. he proved that he loved neither of them. Loving someone means craving for his/her happiness.
Love does never mean that u should get what u want...

"wo do do ladkiton ke saath laga hua tha aur yahan ek bhi nahi mil rahi.."

Shruti said...

@Sathish
Thanks pa :)
Second part lam illa pa!

Shruti said...

@RSV
""Loving someone means craving for his/her happiness.
Love does never mean that u should get what u want""
So true Bhai! One guy marring many girls is a news i saw in a regional daily! That provoked me to write this

balasrini said...

Hey Shruti,

Excellent story... Gr8 writing that you have carried out the story hiding the suspense that venkat & krishna are same... Really haven't expected this suspense element...

And into the story, I feel pity for the girl jhanvi. She haven't done anything wrong, except being perfect in her duties... n kajal the innocent girl...

And, to say, Venkat is the culprit... Even If he started loving Kajal after saying good bye ro Jhanvi, it can be acceptable to some extent atleast... But he just cheated both Jhanvi 'n' Kajal in the name of love... Venkat cannot say the long seperation between him and jhanvi as a reason... Coz true love grows strong on seperation...

Ur narration was well enough to bring the emotions in right proportions from each character... Is this story inspired by any real life happenings???

Aparam eppadi ippadi ellam kathai think panreenga??? athuvum maniratnam style la date ellam vera... kalakureenga.... pir kaalathula peria katha aasiriyara vantha engaluyum konjam kavanichukonga... :-D

vEnKy said...

you are getting shruthi narration has improved but long way to go.

@ RSV

Do get emotional buddy its just story so u cant blame an anytime and you will have your day that day more than two girls will fight for you hehehe.

Anoop said...

Hmmm..this once is nice...
but bit lengthier though.. yea u gave a warnin at first itself... khe khe khe...

Shilpa said...

Really a nice story,I liked the way you narrated it.


@RSV: I thought you are in love with your PC (only today read your post "The love letter"), fir ladki ki fikar kyo hai?


shilpa

BK Chowla said...

You seem to be writing some beautiful stories.Keep it up.

RSV said...

@Venky
thank you yaar....

@Shilpa
compu ko maine propose kiya....usne mana kar diya....
isliye....

Shruti said...

@Bala
Ivlo periya comment ah :)..I tried a lot to manage that suspense til end..Thank God it reflected well..

True love grows on separation? Experience pesarthu pola? :P

Indha story was partially true ma, recently in one of the tamil paper i read about a guy who married 7 s/w proffessional. So adha base ah vechu yezhudhina fiction dan idhu..aana ending yellam yen karpanai!

Maniratnam :O...I have to grow up re :)
Unakku illadha chance ah?

Shruti said...

@Venky
Sebba,thanks :) :)

Shruti said...

@Anoop
hey welcome back after a long time :)
I wrote the caution on the firsthand.

Anu...:) said...

Nice one.....very realistic.The switch in name was good.
Only a few tiny grammatical errors.

And by the way,I think the temple is ISKCON,not ISCON :P


But really nice story :)

Shruti said...

@Shilpa
Hey, thanks a lot girlie :)

Singh Amit said...

Very Nice one Shruti... :)
I too feel It was mistake of Venkat Krishna...As one has no right to play with other's emotions for self and especially when it is "Love"....

I hope people would realize it after reading your post... :)

Cheers!!

Shruti said...

@Chowla ji
Thanks for your good words!

Shruti said...

@RSV
Shilpa and venky, see this guys reply :)

Shruti said...

@Anu
Thanks sissie. I wrote this post in a hurry and forgot to re-read. Will correct them later :)
Thanks

Shruti said...

@Amit
Hey thanks buddy..Lets see whether someone changes.

Sid 'Ravan' Kabe said...

thats a interestingly lengthy post thanks for the warning!!!

Guria said...

Somehow when Kajal said "everyone calls him Krishna, I gathered they are the same guy. Good one.
Okay write a sequel: what will happen when Kajal finds out, which she is bound to. After she was double-crossed too. :)
Can I write that? lol... :D
Nice narration yaar!

Love, G. :)

Shruti said...

@SID
Grrrr.... X-(

Shruti said...

@Guria
You are always brilliant and its not a news that you cracked it before.
Sequel? Lemme think!

Thanks!

Being Pramoda... said...

hey shruti,

i always admire the interest which u take to write such a lengthyy and informative ones..i really admire it dear..

thanks for such an inspiration..loved ur attempt..

Rachana Shakyawar said...

Though lengthy...really worth reading it...!!
Great Story..
Indeed sometimes...mistakes makes us smile..at the end!

balasrini said...

Yen ivlo periya comment adika koodatha????

Hmmm... experience than... itha maari niraya padichum... padam paarthum... vantha experience.... :-)

Oh... one guy - 7 girls.... kuduthu vachavan pola iruku.... ha ha ha... just kidding... :-P he should be taught a good lesson by those girls... Even educated girls are getting cheated sometimes....

Hello... Maniratnam nu chumma oru pechukku sonna... athukulla nambittaya shruthi??????? :-D :-D :-D

The Aspirant said...

a superb one by you again.......
well wad a story dis is, citing d truth abt life's hard reality dat all hv to fac one day.......
life is a roller coaster ride, so tighten ur seat belts to avoid faling.... ;)
Hats off to u...

cheers

☥ ѕωαмι ηανєєη said...

love hurts .... :(

Aditya said...

Nice mix of emotional story. I like the narration of the story , date wise. As I always say, guys are weird species. so no wonder about what that venkat or krishna did. Actually at the end, Jhanvi made anther mistake of not telling her friend the very moment she saw her album. its not temporary hurt which is important but her friend's permanent happiness is important :)

Shruti said...

@Prams
Hey thanks for adjudging me!! U know what? I love writing long stories cos they kindled my creativity

Shruti said...

@Rachna
Hi girlie :)
Sorry for the length of the post! Hope i didn't bore you half way!

Shruti said...

@Bala
Dharalama panalame!!
Kuduthu vechavana? Oru ponna vechu olunga kudumbam nadatharthey kastam...idhula 7!!
Huh...Brilliant guy!

Aiye, solretha yellam apdiye namba nan yenna balava? :P

Shruti said...

@The Aspirant
Thanks a ton!

Shruti said...

@Naveen
Not always!

Shruti said...

@Adi
Thanks mate :). Nice to hear the line 'Guys are weird' by a guy.

evanescentthoughts said...

Nice twist about the names.. liked that part a lot..good story girl! :)

Shruti said...

@Avada
Thanks sweety!

balasrini said...

Oh... right than... kuzhanthai manasu enakku... yaaru enna sonnalum nambiruven... how did u found that shruti???? Really brilliant!!! :-)

Shruti said...

@Bala
Kuzhantha manasa? Kelunga kelunga...balakku kuzhandha manasam...
How did i find it?? Real brilliance :P

RSV said...

hey Shruti
congrats for the tangy tuesday pick....

Shruti said...

@RSV
Hey rahul thanks :)

Singh Amit said...

Congrats for your tangy Tuesday pick.. Shruti :)
I too have got this for one of my post at the same day..So ....Cheers!!

Shruti said...

@Amit
Hey thanks amit :)
Hey wow! Same day both of our posts got selected! Congo yaar
Cheers to you too!!

Ekam said...

Interesting. Undoubtedly, it was Venkar's mistake. He was playing with both girls' emotions.

Shruti said...

@Ekam
Hey thanks girlie! Yes.. he is a moron!

Neha said...

congratulations gal...another feather on ur cap...cool...

now the story, very well narrated... quite precise...not a single word wasted...very nice...tc:)

Shruti said...

@Neha
Precise? Wow!! Thanks girlie!

Makk said...

I dont knwo how ..but you are becoming predictable for me at least.

Still Nice One!!

Keep smiling!

Shruti said...

@Makk
I should service my mind for making you to keep guessing!!
Thanks buddy!

Swaram said...

Wow! Luved the way Jahnavi took it all :) Woman of substance :)

N Congrats on the recognition :)

Shruti said...

@Swaram
Thanks a ton! Yes, i wanted to portray her as a woman of substance

Abdul said...

good one.. well written.. quit ur boring job(if its boring) and write screenplays for movies..

wonder wat happens to jhanvi next!!!!
cos i know a few jhanvis and tell u wat its very difficult to reply to their mails.. its always somethin missin in life for them despite a gr8 job, hefty salary, gr8 city with hunks all around!!! grrr

pls write the next installment of this story.. put urself in jhanvi's shoes and think wat happens next.. perhaps i cud figure out a way to pep up my friends..

Shruti said...

@Abdul!
I don've a job at present and am waiting for my joining date!!

Many want me to write new dawn-part two!
Lemme try!
Thanks !!

Guria said...

Hey, my heartiest Congratulations on being the Tuesday pick on Blogadda!
Just one more of the impending several, trust me...
After all Shruti is THE BEST!!! :)

Lots of love, G. :)

Shruti said...

@Guria
Thanks! You always make me go wordless (as in speechless, cos am typing her and nt speaking :P)!!

Am trying to become the Best!

HaRy!! said...

Hey Sruthi... unoda sogathai arambichitiya...but as usual always making a brilliant impression indeed :)!! yeah quite a long story but sema screenplay...ana etho told me that Venkat and Krishna are goin to be same....maybe too many tamil movies lately..neverthless...am not sure if its Jhanvi's mistake, as this is how the world is now...no time/space for yurself...so make time for yur loved one's yes i agree...but understanding irukanum thane...athu important! anyways nala post me reading after a looong time!..tc

Shruti said...

@Hary
Sogatha lam pizhiya maaten pa ;)
Thank tou thank you! Screenplay nanna irundhuda?? Hehehe.... :P Thanks! Unakku RAGAVAN INSTINCT ah!?

Thanks!

HaRy!! said...

yeah back home they call it as HaRy instinct...intha bantha ku onum kurachal ila da mokai hary..hayo hayo :)

Shruti said...

@Hary
U know what? Here u reflected the conflicts of ur Mind and Heart ;)

thoughtworld said...

Hey..I loved your narration. I feel the most important element in any relationship is trust! Even if this Venkat was seeing another girl..he should have the gutso to tell this to Jhanvi. He dint that means he did cheat her and wanted to play safe.

Even though it is such a disgusting thing to do..it is so prominent and common these days!

Shruti said...

@Amrit
Thanks buddy :)
If trust was there this guy would not have done so :)

Saurabh Panshikar said...

thoroughly enjoyed reading this one...

Well deserved

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