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Sunday, October 11, 2009

55 Fiction - #17


Hey you are about to read my next 55Fiction. By this time who is visiting my blog must have known what is 55Fiction. Anyway's, for the first timers, understand what is 55Fiction!? 55 Fiction is a form of micro fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.Most 55 Fiction works are dramatized so as to get the effect in limited time.

IN THE LIGHT

Guru entered the classroom and his eyes rested upon Nandu sitting in the last bench and was staring bleakly at the wall.

"Hi Nandu"lightgraffiti01
"Hi Guru"
"Hey prepared for science test?"
".............."
"Tell me Nandu"
"No I didn't"
"Why?"
"There was no light"
"Oh my God! Power cut eh?"
"No. Yesterday was new moon day"

This is surely a next-door happening that most of us would have witnessed. Thatched huts's only light in the night - Moon! I have recently seen guys studying in street-lights and moon-lit houses. But when I entered my friends house, the fan and the light was there in a place where people are not around. I thought, "How much this light and fan would have helped those little kids out on the street longing for lights!". If we cannot help the society, lets not hinder them. Save the limited, non-renewable resources.

How is my 55Fiction?

With Love,

Shruti-Logo

Image Courtesy : Google Images

78 comments:

Sid 'Ravan' Kabe said...

hey nice and awesome...and d picture is a award winner!!!!

Shruti said...

@Sid
hey thanks a ton siddhu! :) I loved this pic too!

RSV said...

WHAT can I say?
I mean you touched many points at the same time....

touching..indeed..

Shruti said...

@RSV
Always u comment 'WHAT CAN I SAY' and u aren saying anything :O

Thanks :)

Guria said...

What can I say??
Yours is a complete full moon! :)
Touching causes in your work is a good idea :)

Love G.

Shruti said...

@Guria
Thank you!

Keep Smiling!

Yellow Tulip said...

soo true dear:)...loved the pic:)...

kanaguonline said...

thought provoking Shruti... :)

really nice..

Shruti said...

@Nandhita
Thanks girlie :)

Shruti said...

@Kanagu
Hi :)
Thank you

Rahil said...

55 words nicely used :)

and believe me i too dont like people wasting resources !!

RSV said...

hey shruti....
I said just what guria repeated...
why didn't u asked her the same question...


you have pretty successfully illustrated your feelings through this 55F...Touching causes in your work is a good idea..indeed...

and remember this.....when the person in front of you is a master you don't explain to him/her what u understood..u just clap....and later on awe with your other friends...
on the other hand if the person is in his/her learning stage and you feel you don't have anything left in you to teach him... you once again clap and applaud and then leave....
again.. i have this certain rule of commenting...i have a certain level of standard for each of the blogs I visit..relatively each of them is unique but there are some which appeal to me the most... I LOVE YOUR BLOG SIMPLY because you say even the toughest of things in the simplest of ways...but that doesn't mean I will repeat this thing again again....if I do so, I am not worthy enough to be called your bro...I definitely point out the niche' in the post every time I find some....(I think you know it very well)..
in fact from now onwards I am really thinking of raising level of minimum accepted standard from your blog..in that case be prepared to have some criticism as well...it will be positive I assure you...

AND NEVER TAKE IT TO YOUR HEART THAT i SOMETIMES SAY LESS..ITS JUST BECAUSE I COMPLETELY UNDERSTOOD WHAT U WANT TO SAY..

Neha said...

kya baat hai shruti, very good hai ji...

gal, please dont use tht 55 wala image on top...dashboard pe wo hi dikhta hai...ths image is so awesome...wo flaunt kar na..

Sat_hi_sh said...

The pic is really kewl pa....
Well i didnt understand the 55-fiction part until i read the passage below...


Factful post shruthi ,maybe this will change one day with equal oppurtunity for everyone :)


keep blogging
cheers!!!

WELCOME TO MY WORLD OF POETRY: said...

Very true in a few words.

Yvonnne.

mAhEsH KaLaAL said...

Hi Shruti,

I am standing and clapping for you,your post and the pic, literally.

It is indeed an absolute 55 fiction.

It did reflect the social inequality in a simple, yet, impacting manner. Yes, it did project the unsaid words and situations.

The Pic indeed complement the topic

Awwwwwwesssssssssommmmme post.....
:) :) :)

Vipul Grover said...

Nice post girl! Succinct nd thoughtful :)

vEnKy said...

superb 55 fiction. The cause is great. Onething I couldn't understand is that 55 fiction is about poverty of children and the message is save energy. Anyways good one.

Miss_Nobody said...

Absolute win-win...loved it.Very touching too.Go you!

Makk said...

Now that IS a nice one indeed...

Cool...!!!

Keep it up!

Ekam said...

Wow!

Shashank Shekhar said...

wow, good one Shruti! Good to see you writing for a cause!

I am sorry, could not reply to your comment. I was actually out of town for almost a month with no internet, but now I am back. I have updated my blog as well with a new poem that I wrote few days back. Do check it when you get some time. :)

Swaram said...

A msg conveyed really well :)
Lovely pic to go with it! Really apt :)

Bharathi said...

good one. you became societal now a days. aint you?

Shruti said...

@Rahil
Welcome to my space :)
Thanks and come lets join hands and save energy!

Shruti said...

@RSV
Whoa such a long comment! Thank you! My bro has to be my critic. Who else will be my critic and help me to grow as a good writer?

I WILL NEVER MISTAKE U bro

Shruti said...

@Neha
Oops sorry neha...will not put tat picture from my next post and thanks a ton for ur appreciations!

Shruti said...

@Sathish
Oh migh! Am sorry that i didn't write properly to make u understand. Forgive me na..
Thanks for ur kewl comments!

Singh Amit said...

Very Nice one Shruti.. :)

I loved the message u delivered...

Loved this line especially.. :)
"If we cannot help the society, lets not hinder them."

Cheers!!

Shruti said...

@Yvonne
Thanks Lady!

Shruti said...

@Mahesh
""I am standing and clapping for you,your post and the pic, literally""
Am i seeing it correctly? Ahhhh!! Am elated...
Thank you
Thank you and
Many thanks to you!

Shruti said...

@Vipul
Thanks vipsy :)

Shruti said...

@Venky
Hey thanks da :)
The reason - When those people earn well and long for electricity it should should be there. If we waste all our energy like this, they won't see the light anytime!

Shruti said...

@Miss Nobody
Thanks sweety.. Win-Win eh :) Thanks

Shruti said...

@Makk
Hi buddy :)
Thank you :)

Shruti said...

@Ekam
:)
That spoke many words :)
Thanks swety

Shruti said...

@Shashank
Welcome back after a longggg time budddyyy!! Thanks a ton!

Will check out yours now :)

vEnKy said...

@ Shruthi
YOu are thinking way ahead yamma kalakals po

Shruti said...

@Swaram
Hey,Thanks sweety!!
Even i loved that pic a lot!

Shruti said...

@Bharathi
Thanks buddy! Everything is because of the introspection i did after reading ur posts!

You wrote my 2700th comment! Thanks for that!

Shruti said...

@Amit
Thanks a lot buddy!!

Shruti said...

@Venky
Romba pugazhada... :P
Thanks da!

Bharathi said...

2700 comments. thats quite an achievement. I am flattered on your comment but nevertheless I am happy that atleast my blog is of some use.

Shruti said...

@Bharathi
Thanks Bharathi!! Its not flattery! I told what i felt in my heart!

Shilpa said...

55 fiction is great as usual and message that you gave is also great. :)



shilpa

Shruti said...

@Shilpa
Thanks girlie :)

Benny said...

gud Shruthi...v touchin! I hav to reiterate the same..I'm fallin in love with u r 55 F :)

Shruti said...

@Benny
Ahem Ahem :) :D
The guy who asked me to write 555 fiction is fallin in love with my 55F

balasrini said...

Short 'n' chweet... but smart 'n' poignant too...

And a thing to be appreciated is that you have taken up a noble issue to tell us in this short fiction... Very well written buddy!!!

Keep going Shruti...

Riya Rocks said...

nice it is :)

Shankar said...

A good 55... the paragraph at the end touched my heart more than the 55...

good post...

Shruti said...

@Bala
Hi buddy! Thanks for those sweet words

Shruti said...

@Riya
Thanks Girlie :)

Shruti said...

@Shankz
Hey thanks da :)
Appo 55 nanna illaya!! :(

Shankar said...

hey..i never said your 55 is bad.. first specified its a good 55.. may be the last paragraph overshadowed the beauty of 55..

you know most of the street lights in Chennai would glow even after 8 in the morning...

Aditya said...

Fine point , put across very nicely through very few words. 55fiction is getting better with you :)

Shruti said...

@Shankar!
Oh apdi sonaya!! Got it!!

Corect...Even today while going to kkngr i saw street lights glowing! Poor maintenance!

Shruti said...

@Adi
Hey Thanks for dropping by adi!!

Seems you are toooooo busy these days!
Good luck re

BK Chowla said...

Very nice post and the picture is extermely impressive.

Shruti said...

@Chowla Ji
Thanks a ton ji!

Mustaf said...

This was completely out of box!!Never thought such a powerful message could be conveyed through 55 fiction!!Awesome :)

Shruti said...

@Mustaf
Thanks buddy :)
Think out of the box and you could write a much better one!

HaRy!! said...

gud one sruthi...yeah at least the best we can do is stay quiet and not waste them!! Can see so many lights and fans running wit no soul around!!...pic is truely a classic...

Shruti said...

@Hary
Adhe dan.. Wherever i go i witness these things! Yeppo dan thirundhaporom?
Thanks a ton!!

Abdul said...

hey.. aren't u exaggerating.. come on.. who reads under moonlight nowadays..

Shruti said...

@Abdul
Nothing is there to exaggerate abdul! I have seen this with my own eyes. Lil kids in slum,without street lights studying through moon light!
We are sitting in AC rooms, before lappie and questions about these!

Chetan said...

hey good one
a 55 fiction with a message

Anu...:) said...

Nice post once again! :)
{No time right now so would come back to comment properly if possible:P}

Shruti said...

@Chetan
Hey thanks for the comment re!!

Shruti said...

@Anu
Hey, thanks for the comment! Welcome back again!

evanescentthoughts said...

Awesome girl.. loved the story.. reminds me of my grandfather who had studied under streetlights.. it was very touching.. the twist at the end was too good!

Shruti said...

@Avada
Hey thanks girlie!!
Ur grandpa studied in streetlights?! :) pity!

thoughtworld said...

There you go...one more!! One more interesting 55 fiction!! Kudos lady! And yes...even I loved the pic!

Being Pramoda... said...

hi Shruti,

good one dear..by the way, whats new moon day ?

Shruti said...

@Amrit
hey buddy...hi :)Thank you for dropping by and adjudging this as a good one!

Shruti said...

@Prams
hey thanks...new moon day is amavasya.. The lunar phase.

Vishnu said...

touching..kalakareengo.. not havin time.. so reading only ur 55s.. will read others later..

Shruti said...

@Vishnu
Come back and read others vishnu! :)
Thanks for ur compliments!

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