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Tuesday, October 6, 2009

55 Fiction - #16


Hi friends! This is my 16th 55Fiction. This is purely a fiction and doesn't imply on any particular individual.

Those who are new to this concept, understand what is 55Fiction!? 55 Fiction is a form of micro fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.Most 55 Fiction works are dramatized so as to get the effect in limited time.

PASSIONATE KISS

kiss


Late,chilly weekend nights of kissing are always such a romantic idea.

Mmmm.....damn, he was good. The pressure was perfect. He teased her naughtily. Rough drags accompanied with passionate kisses aroused her.
The warmth drawing her in closer, she wanted it to go on forever....

The director said “Cut! The shot came well!"

So? How is this 55Fiction? Please do comment on this 55 fiction attempt!

With Love,

Shruti-Logo

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100 comments:

Shankar said...

he..he..lol.. A very good 55 Shruthi...good one..

kasabiangirl said...

Nice Shruti! The end is good and came as a surprise ;)

Miss_Nobody said...

Pretty darn GOOD :) This is great.keep more coming

Shruti said...

@Shankz
Hey yes!! :P
Thanks!!
:D

Shruti said...

@Kasabian Girl
Hey welcome back after a long time!!
:P
Thanks girlie!

Shruti said...

@Miss Nobody
Hey thanks a ton sweety!!

WELCOME TO MY WORLD OF POETRY: said...

Loved it another winner.


Yvonne.

Shruti said...

@Yvonne
A Winner? Wow!!
Thanks

Benny said...

hey weightu..super ah irundhudu!!! nice one :)

R S V said...

he he I sometimes dream to be the male counterpart...
good one...

☥ ѕωαмι ηανєєη said...

good one !!

lostworld said...

Oooh what a hot story! ;)

Niiice. You're becoming the queen of 55 word stories! Getting better with each 'Take' !!

Paritosh said...

Late,chilly weekend nights of kissing are always such a romantic idea.

Well, well, well... What should I say? ;)

vEnKy said...

No 1: i am surprised and happy that you posted this in broad daylight rather demeaning day light to be precise.

No2 : you are getting really better and at this 55 fiction. Finally you are showing the real deal.

Singh Amit said...

This is very nice one ...shruti.. :)
Enjoyed it.. :)
Cheers!!

SiMbA tAgO said...

wow everytime u write 55s ... m jus loving them ..... so elegant and crisp writing ... nice one though ... very funny and nie end ...

unexpected ...

Ekam said...

Hehe :D
Surprise element in director :D
Good one :)

Swaram said...

ROFL :D U do manage to end it so well every time girl! Gr8 gng :)

Riya Rocks said...

lol damn good :)
enjoyed it :P

Guria said...

Goodie! What a description!
Enjoyed thoroughly :)

Neha said...

haha, this surprise was different from all the other surprises that I read on other posts...dame cool...

PS: see I had told u na, ur post Tardy Realization is indeed a great one...it got picked up for the spicy saturday post too...congo :)

HaRy!! said...

ena oru villathanam!!he he... neeyum unoda thoughts!! nala room pottu yosipingalo!! or is it brain storming..

RAM said...

Hahaha...Thats pretty cool one... a different one indeed.. Keep blogging :)

Shruti said...

@Benny
Hey thala, thanks da :)

Shruti said...

@RSV
Lol :P
Thanks :)

Shruti said...

@Naveen
Thanks!

Shruti said...

@Lostworld
Hey Really it is a hot story girl ;)

'Take'
That's a nice punch! Good!

Thanks girlie!

Sat_hi_sh said...

lolz....
good 55-fiction Shruthi :)
enjoyed it :)


Huh!!Dunno when am gonna be the first person to comment on ur post..
Such is the demand for ur posts these days ;)
TOUCHWOOD :D


keep blogging
cheers!!!

Shruti said...

@Paritosh!
""What should I say? ;)""
Ahhhh!! Tell me, whatever u think! :P

Shruti said...

@Venkz
No.1: Broad day-light! It would have been better if i posted this in night :P

No.2:That's a real compliment! Thanks da!

Shruti said...

@Amit
Hey thanks buddy

Shruti said...

@Simba
Heheheh!! Thanks buddy!!
Thanks for those appreciation!

Shruti said...

@Ekam
Hey thanks girlie!

Chetan said...

i thought of something else at the end
good one, and different one
keep going!

Shruti said...

@Swaram
""U do manage to end it so well every time girl""
Ahhh!! That's a sweet comment!
Thanks a ton!

Shruti said...

@Riya
Welcome to my space!
Thanks!

Shruti said...

@Guria
Enjoyed!? Thanks!

Shilpa said...

Now this was a LOL one!!!

:D

shilpa

Shruti said...

@Neha
Really!!???Wow!! Diferent from everything?!
Thanks girl!

P.S:Yes lawyer's view never go wrong!

Shruti said...

@Hary
Hey...yen pa ipdi pesare!!
Room podala! Thaniya ukkandhu yosichu paru! Indha maadhri thathuvum naraya varum :P

Shruti said...

@Ram
Thanks da!

Shruti said...

@Sathish
yen blog la comment pana ivlo potiya!!
Pull arikudhu!

Thanks for ur comments buddy!

Shruti said...

@Chetan
Thanks for your best wishes buddy!

Shruti said...

@Shilpa
:P :D :P :D
Thanks :)

Being Pramoda... said...

hahaha...am still in all laugh .. :) ..:)

Shruti said...

@Prams!
hehehehe :)
Laugh a lot!

ScarletTd1ar1es said...

another masterpiece from the master herself. :P

Shruti said...

@Scarlet diaries
AhhH!!! Thanks a ton re!! :)

ScarletTd1ar1es said...

tsk tsk. then lemme c u on my blog once. :P
ps: ever tried dark?

u shud. its easy.

Samadrita said...

That was nice.The surprise element was perfect.Couldn't have guessed. :)

Shruti said...

@Scarlet diaries
Yes! Will visit for sure :)
Dark?? That word scares the hell outta me!!

Shruti said...

@Sammy
Hey thanks girlie!!
Happy that i can satisfy you!

Indian Pundit said...

Good one Shruti.

Nice work.

evanescentthoughts said...

Good one girlie.. from murder and tragedy to kissing eh? ;) nice progression.. hehe.. just kidding.. I cudnt guess the ending.. full suspense..

☥ ѕωαмι ηανєєη said...

Love your blog ..... there is an award waiting for u at my blog :)

kanaguonline said...

LOL!!!!

very nice one... :)

kanaguonline said...

ama... directorku yen indha kola veri.. ?? ;)

pra said...

Perfect Shruti. Nice one!:-)

Mustaf said...

No comment on the post, it's any way good, everyone has said so, one more person echoing the same doesn't make any diff :)

BTW, are u trying ur hands on acting too nowadays :D, nehi just a wild thought randomly came. woh heroine ap to nehi the na? kyuke itna achha fiction imagine karna muskil hain without reality!! ho ho he he ha ha

BK Chowla said...

Shruti,it is a very nice post.I am still trying to get the feel of 55.Vipul has suggested I try 55.????

Mustaf said...

hellooo...please check my latest 55 fiction, another one and purely fictitious, no reality :)

Riya Rocks said...

Thanks for welcoming me :)
I have tried to write 55 Fiction too..i will be glad if u check it out n tell me tht is it good or not.. m waiting :)

Yellow Tulip said...

he he...:)...too good dear:)..nice cut:)...

Shruti said...

@IP
Thanks!

Shruti said...

@Avada
""from murder and tragedy to kissing eh""
Hey actually, i came in reverse order i guess!!
First it shud have been kissing-->Love & Lust, then when both betrays it shud be tragedy. Then, without tolerating this it shud have been a murder :P :P

Shruti said...

@Naveen
Hey thanks a ton! Added your award too :)
Thanks!

Shruti said...

@Kanagu
Thanks girlie!

Shruti said...

@Kanagu
Anga than director twist vechanga!! :P

Shruti said...

@Pra
Thanks a ton girlie!

Shruti said...

@Mustaf
Arey, thanks for those kind words! I dint try acting yaar!! :O :O
You always think the other way!

Shruti said...

@Chowla Ji
Ji,thanks a ton!! Arey try it and lets all witness a new dawn! Hope your 55Fictions will be awesoem!

Shruti said...

@Mustaf
Saw And commented

Shruti said...

@Riya
Hi girlie!!
Will check ouT!!

Shruti said...

@Yellow tulip
Thanks girlie!!

Prads said...

nice realy .... goood
nice expressions hahahhahahhaha

i guessed tat last line before completing ,,,,,

ur 55 fiction s romantic ...
hahhaha

but dont keep end like this ,,,,
u rock da...shruts

Regards,
Prasee

Shruti said...

@Prasee
U expected the ending? :O
Anyways thanks!

Vishnu said...

mokka poteengalae.. not only the director cut it.. u too cut it short.. loved it..

Shruti said...

Vishnu
55fiction na apdi dan!! Pinna full movie, flowers dashing lam ah kamipanga :P

Thanks!

Aditya said...

Even I wished it would go on forever ;)

Nice creativity haan ;)

Shruti said...

@Adi
Haan?! Whats this? Let me tell the director. He may organize some special shows for you!

Abdul said...

wonder if the girl wanted a re-take.. but the second take wouldnt have the same effect as before, ud it? wats so exciting abt romance/sex is not the actual physical interaction but the lack of it.. knowing it is right in front of you and u'd eventually get it but as for this precise moment t is fresh, pristine and of course unavilable.. :)

ur post reminded me of a poem by John keats - 'ode on a greecian urn'.. the bold lover and his maiden who'll remain one forever..

wonder wats bigger.. the prescence of beauty or the ability of mankind to admire it..

Mustaf said...

You always think the other way! areeee...what does it mean? :d achhi hain ya bura? thik hain...abhi se sirf sidha sochunga..will the following comments be OK?
"Awesome...very good yar..excellent, i loved the way u penned it down"...i think this comment is applicable to any and every post..chalega na :P?

Shruti said...

@Abdul
Hi yaar!!
Second take ?? Ummmm... No chance!
Even i read 'ode on a greacian urn
"" Bold Lover, never, never canst thou kiss,
Though winning near the goal -yet, do not grieve;""

A great comment!!

Shruti said...

@Mustaf
Woh neither achi hai nor buri! Did i mean it that way? No!!!!!
Actually i read your other comment, ur thought,that i did not post your comment! I said "You always think the other way" for that!

Mustaf said...

arree...didn't you see my smiley signs kya in my prev comment..bhar bhar ke dalethe ta ke u dont take the comment srsly :) (putting one more here :D)

Shruti said...

@Mustaf
Arey! Maaf karo na mustaf! Ek aur request! Aap apne comments english mein type karo. Mujhe hindi nahi maalum hai!

Bharathi said...

nice one. you becoming better and better

Shruti said...

@Bharathi
Welcome back after a log time!!
Thank you so much yaar!!

mAhEsH KaLaAL said...

splendid and sublime....realistic and quite igniting. :)

Shruti said...

@Mahesh
Welcome to my blog yaar!!
Thank you for those nice words!!

Makk said...

hummm

climax... you could have written better..i know


anyway ....check out my page..some thing for you

Shruti said...

@Makk
will try to write better next time!!
Thanks! Also will check out now!!

balasrini said...

"Late,chilly weekend nights of kissing are always such a romantic idea. " - Experience pesutha shruti???

Warm begining... hot proceedings... and atlast a thumping suspense... overall good writing DUDETTE...

Methu konjam konjama mooda engayo kondu poga vachitu, mandayila nachinu oru kottu vacha mari irunthichu... :-D :-D

Shruti said...

@Bala
Experience ah?yen bala indha kola veri yen mela?? DUDETTE?? :P
understood thereason :)
LAST POINT: LOL! :P

balasrini said...

@Shruti...

Kolai veri ellam illa... athavathu apadi experience iruntha, unga kitta sishyana senthukalamenu than... :-P

Aaana innum answer sollave illaye... experience nu eduthukkava????

Shruti said...

@Bala
hey pichu pichu!!
yenadhidhu?
my policy is- BEING SINGLE IS FUN
Indha exp lam illa pa..

balasrini said...

@Shruti...

ha ha... :-)
y tension??? relax...
less tension, more work ma...

"BEING SINGLE IS FUN" - ithu konjam too mucha theriyala... ella ponungalum kazhuthula thaali nu onnu erura varaikum adichu vidura dialogue la onnu ithu than shruti madam...

yen innum un requirements fullfill panra qualitiesoda aalu kidaikalaya???

Shruti said...

@Bala
I won't get tensed that easily bala..

All girls are not same. I am not tat sort which you have mentioned here.

Aalu? Yen requirements romba kami bala. Adhukke aalu illa.. Innum perusa plan potta, avlo dan!!

Balakku naraya GF's eh? or married?

balasrini said...

ha ha ha... Paakalam... how different u r from other girls nu....

Oru ponnuku requirements romba kammiya... adhisayam aanal unmaya????

Nee vera... GFs kidayathu... marriedum kidayathu... Still a enjoying bashing bachelor!!! :-D

Shruti said...

@Bala
Definitely different bala!!
Adisayam aanal unmai...idhu kadhai alla nijam :P

Bashing bachelor eh? hehehe :P :D

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