Wednesday, November 25, 2009

55 Fiction - #23

It has been a long time since I wrote a 55Fiction. So I thought of writing one now. Understand what is 55Fiction!? 55 Fiction is a form of micro fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.Most 55 Fiction works are dramatized so as to get the effect in limited time. Come, lets get into the action!

ONE FINE DAY....

It wasn't a good day. The kid had fever,maid didn't come, MIL is coming home. Her bones ached. It wasOneFineDay_logo treacherous. She wondered why she had agreed to do this job and felt rage flaring up inside. She quickly hid it with a faint half smile.

"Perfect, Madame Lisa hold that smile" said DaVinci.


P.S : Mona Lisa (also known as La Gioconda or La Joconde) is a 16th century portrait Lisa Gherardini, wife of Francesco del Giocondo. It is perhaps the most famous and iconic painting in the world. painted in oil on a poplar panel by Leonardo da Vinci during the Italian Renaissance. The work is owned by the Government of France and is on the wall in the Louvre in Paris, France with the title

With Love,

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60 comments:

Makk said...

I just smiled up...

I dont know its ...faint half or ..some thing else....:)

Keep it up!

Shilpa Garg said...

Oh wow!! Is it true??
No, I guess, this is your creativity!! Damn cool!! :)

lostworld said...

Haha.. Surprise ending !!!! :-) So we now know how Da Vinci got her to pose.. LOL.

Urvashi said...

Woww..good one this was....!! :)

Rajalakshmi Umapathy said...

oi... That was too cool;) Unnala mattum than mudiyam da...

HaRy!! said...

yippeeee i saw the dead beauty with my own eyes ...! truly onum perusa difference ila...ana seeing the masterpiece it self gave me goosebumps!

athivas said...

Just impressed at your imagination :)

pRiYaN...! said...

mona lisa was Leonardo da vinci's master piece and i hope this 23rd story 'One fine day' is your master piece !! cheers continue your great work !

Raj said...

lol! :)
the mona lisa smile aye?

kanagu said...

creative.. :) :) wonderful shruti :)

Roshmi Sinha said...

Innovative thinking!

PS: Some say, it was Da Vinci himself... in drag.

Anu...:) said...

That was nice :)

Neha said...

hats off to ur imagination :)

ηανєєη said...

that was new .. as usual :)

evanescentthoughts said...

What an imagination girl :) hehe.. that was something totallyyyy different. Liked it as usual :)

gils said...

nice twist in the end :) really interesting

Vipul Grover said...

lol.. lambi taking lambi strides :p
cool!

WELCOME TO MY WORLD OF POETRY: said...

A fine piece of writing. I love your 55 words,

Yvonne.

Darshan Chande said...

Ha! First couple of times I read it and didn't understand it!!! Third time I actually got it.. and it's great!!! What an imagination! :)

vEnKy said...

Pretty different from some of ur 55 fiction. I liked it very much. keep trying this way

Guria said...

You were there?? :O
Great!! :)

Jokes apart, Lamb-y, sorry Your Highness, I love your 55-ers, no wonder you are the reigning queen! ;) :)

Miss_Nobody said...

Ingenious!You are so good at this!

Shruti said...

>>Urvashi
Thank u :)

Shruti said...

>>Athivas
Hey, thanks

Shruti said...

>>Rohitha
LOL :P
Now those people are nt here, or else we will b behind the bars :P

Shruti said...

>>priyan
My masterpiece eh?!
Thank u!!

Shruti said...

>>Shilpz
This is no original...My scribblings :P
Thank u!

Shruti said...

>>Hary
Such is the power of their paintings! They may give the best feeling when we witness them really!

Shruti said...

>>Raji
Ehhh!! Thanks da :)

Shruti said...

>>Makk
Yours must be full...Lisa gave her faint smile :P

Shruti said...

>>Roshmi
Really?!??! I never knew that scoop

Shruti said...

>>Raj
Naah!! Try somemore :)

Shruti said...

>>Kanagu
Thank u!

Shruti said...

>>Anu
Welcome back!!
Thanku!

Shruti said...

>>Neha
Thanks :)

Shruti said...

>>Naveen
Thanks :)

Shruti said...

>>Avada
Ahem ahem
Thanku!

Shruti said...

>>Darshan
U understood it the third time only!?!? Poor me!

Shruti said...

>>Gils
Thank u!

Shruti said...

>>Vipsy
:D
Thank u!

Shruti said...

>>Yvonne
Thanks lady :)

Shruti said...

>>Venky
Sure :-)

Shruti said...

>>Guria
Reigning queen eh?! Hehehe :D Thankyou sweety!

Shruti said...

>>MN
Thanks re :)

Abdul said...

monalisa is arguably the ugliest figure who's become so famous.. yeww.. europeans are tasteless.. americans too..

Mahesh Kalaal said...

Innovative, original and fresh....
simply fantabulous.....
Keep exploring the wells of creativity on the other side of the horizons...
Check out all the boundaries, limits, parameters and standards of writing....
Create new genres.....

The Aspirant said...

just the best 55 fiction by you.........hw can u be so creative, dats really a great imagination.....just awesum......

Shruti said...

>>Abdul
I always wait for your comment which clearly distinguishes all others :P

Shruti said...

>>Mahi
Sure :-)
Thanks for the 'ever encouraging' nice words!

Shruti said...

>>TA
Hehehe :D
Thank u!

Musings of a lonely traveler said...

Oh that's the reason she was withering that half-smile...Hei! I remember reading somewhere that Mona Lisa is the portrait of Da Vinci himself...Who cares for that anyway...good and innovative post Shruti :)

Shruti said...

@Mohammed
Even I read it somewhere anna!
Thank you!

Prads said...

wowowoow wat a masterpiece way of thinking abt a masterpiece work.

Regrads,
Prasee

Shruti said...

>>Prasee
Thank u!

Saurabh Panshikar said...

Congrats for making the AG finals!

Fingers Crossed

☆Tharangni☆ said...

wow!! it was reallllyyyyyyy nice and awesome!! though i don't know who MIL is... :'(

asawaripuranik said...

That is a wonderful 55 fiction Shruti! I have such days so many times but there is no Da Vinchi to paint my portrate!! :-)
You have been nominated for The best 55 er...Congrats!!! and best of luck!!

indianhomemaker said...

Ha never thought of this! But makes a lot of sense :)
Absolutely brilliant!!!

Swaram said...

LOL .. this one is awesome! My vote is for u :D

Bala said...

Good... but not so good... Not up to ur mark DUDETTE!!!

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