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Monday, November 30, 2009

55 Fiction - #24

Here is my 24th 55-fiction. What is 55Fiction!? 55 Fiction is a form of micro fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.Most 55 Fiction works are dramatized so as to get the effect in limited time. Come, lets get into the action!

AN ENCOUNTER

Eyes met eyes over a novel on the train. They exchanged glances, conversation, addresses. She was mesmerized by the way he spoke. It was perfect, she thought. They kissed goodbye in the corner where no one could see. He promised to visit after her return from vacation.
She returned home to find her house ransacked.


With Love,

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63 comments:

Rajalakshmi Umapathy said...

Enna koduma?? pasangala nambavae kudathu... Rite shruthi...

Anyways.. something new and different kalakura po..

Shruti said...

>>Raji
We can believe guys, but we shouldn't trust unfamiliar guys :)
Hope u understood the difference between the two!

Is it different!?!? Thank u sweety!

pRiYaN...! said...

its a untouched topic....you have succeeded in every attempt you have made...cheersss !!!

-pRiYaN..!

Rajlakshmi said...

Thats really a different kind of story.. Interesting plot.. I read the ending twice.. Just loved the feel of it.

Ravan said...

did not like the concept, unless and until you prove that the two person where same, u cannot rule out anything.

Robing a persons house can b accompalished anytime, so need not b urs, unless of course if you do boast about ur large house in that case, you should get robed.


Cheers,
Ravan
There is a funny story in everything!!

HaRy!! said...

pasangala namba kudathaaa! :( ...emathravanga yara iruntha ena...blame the one who gets cheat instead!! it can always be the other way around bcos pasanga easily for for any female!...epadi nama reverse swing!

vEnKy said...

good one shruthi thirudargal Jakirathai. It happen to anyone. I can see why you used a man and women conversation to build up the tension. Well thought one.

Kay said...

haha...isn't that right!? :)

gils said...

rofl D: :D ithu chaancela

Miss_Nobody said...

Thats was great,an interesting lesson to impart

Guria said...

Cute! And different! Good one, girlie!!! :)

Makk said...

lollzzzz...

Be careful...haaan...

:)

nice one.

lostworld said...

Yieeeekkkkks!!! Torture, torment all put together!

Aditya said...

lol poor girl. Good one shruti. I see you are excelling in this format of fiction :)

Roshmi Sinha said...

What a twist in the tale...!

Musings of a lonely traveler said...

Good one Shruti :)

Thousif Raza said...

hmm nice one packs a punch.... girl was hasty, so she made waste :)



i am still waiting for the replies on facebook ;)



take care and keep writing.............

G3 said...

BTW.. Nalla dhaan twist yosikkareenga :))))

G3 said...

Indha pasangalae ippadi thaa esamaan :P

Vineeta said...

hahahaha!! My goodness! Only u can think of such a twist when the start was sooo romantic!! Real good one :))

kanagu said...

pasanga mela apdi enna kandu... :( :(

but then good story :D :D

pra said...

Wonderful one Shruti! I loked the end twist so much!

Kaddu said...

Kahani mein twist... I like it! ;)

Srividya said...

he he:) kollaikara romance:p

Mahesh Sindbandge said...

First time here and glad to see ur attempt at 55F..

See you around sometime at my blog :)

Cheers
Mahesh

Mahesh Sindbandge said...

OH...That's a tragic end.. I knew it when it was getting so romantic, it might end in such a tragedy but did not expect this kind of end :)

Such a stupid girl...Exchanging number is one thing..but she exchanged addresses?? that's height of stupidity...

The Aspirant said...

quite nice one...........again a sting in the tale

Being Pramoda... said...

:)..Quite good and sensitive too..:) Well written shruti..hw r u gal..?

Chatterbox said...

Quite a twist :)

A wonderful 55-fiction piece just like always :)

Cheers!!

RAM said...

Hehehe...good one yaar.. Crisp and clear undestood in the first attempt :P

Shruti said...

>>Thouzif
Welcome to H&M!!
YEah exactly...Btw, what reply?!

ηανєєη said...

:o .... did not expect that .... fun read though .. keep it up

evanescentthoughts said...

Totally unexpected ending! :O really different kind. Good one as usual, queen :)

Shruti said...

>>Mohammed
Thank u anna!

Shruti said...

>>Makk
Heheh :D
Sure :)

Shruti said...

>>Kay
Many a times, it holds true :)

Shruti said...

>>Rohitha
Torture of whom?! :P

Shruti said...

>>Rajlakshmi
You read twice! Ty girl :)

Shruti said...

>>G3
Twist nallarukka?! thanksungammani!

Shruti said...

>>G3
Indirect ah yarayo solrapla irukke...neenga gils ah solla matenga nu i know! :D

Shruti said...

>>Vineeta
:D :P
Thank u girl.. 55Fiction demands such twists!

Shruti said...

>>Roshmi
:P :D Thank u!

Shruti said...

>>Adi
wow, u r back or just a visit?! Thank u!

Shruti said...

>>MN
Thanks sweety!

Shruti said...

>>Gils
Unna pathi yezhudhiteno??

Shruti said...

>>Hary
Indha comment kagave room pottu yosippa pola!

Shruti said...

>>Sid
Opinion differs re :)
Thanks for being frank!

Shruti said...

>>Priyan
Thanks buddy! U have been supportive from the beginning!

Shruti said...

>>Kanagu
Yedho namalala mudinja kaariyam :D

Shruti said...

>>Pra
Thank u girl!! Happy to see u back :)

Shruti said...

>>Kaddu
End mein twist achi hai na?! Thank u!

Shruti said...

>>Sri
:D :P
Scene comment

Shruti said...

>>Mahesh
Welcme to H&M
Stupidity?! Yeah, but this is just a fiction na!

Shruti said...

>>Mahesh
Sure, thank u!

Shruti said...

>>TA
Another sting :P :D
But, u dint get weird thoughts na!?

Shruti said...

>>Prams
Hey thank u!! It has been a long time since i saw u in my blog!!
Am fine girl! How are you?!

Shruti said...

>>CB
Thnx girl :)

Shruti said...

>>Ram
Understood?!? Atlast u started understanding things!

Shruti said...

>>Naveen
Thank u!

Shruti said...

>>Avada
Hey, thanks dearie :)

Shruti said...

>>Thousif
Thank u! What you asked in FB?

Shruti said...

Thank you everyone :)

Bala said...

Gud one Shruti:)

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