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Wednesday, November 4, 2009

55 Fiction - #21

Hey buddies, hi! So how is the week going on.. Here is my 21st fiction! Understand what is 55Fiction!? 55 Fiction is a form of micro fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.Most 55 Fiction works are dramatized so as to get the effect in limited time. So here goes my 55Fiction

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MY FIRST LOVE

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She knew age was catching up on her. She no longer possessed the beauty and liveliness that once won his heart. Every passing day increased her insecurities. How could he forget all the time they spent together? And then, the day arrived. He traded her in for cutie, the much younger impact-Black color Pulsar.


P.S:How is the suspense element in this Fiction?

With Love,

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76 comments:

Shankar said...

he..he... that was funny......

Shruti said...

@Shankz
:P
Thanks :)

Kaka said...

lol...pulsar aa....nice ending..:)

Shruti said...

@Kaka
Pulsar dan :P
Thanks

Chatterbox said...

That was funny :)

Keep writing!

kanagu said...

Nice one Shruti :) the suspense in the end is good and unexpected one :)

Shruti said...

@CB
Thanks Girl :)

Shruti said...

@Kanagu
Thanks re :)

evanescentthoughts said...

Hehe.. this was good :))) I really dint expect this ending for sure! A very good one queen..
Hey why dont you join facebook? It's fun there..everyone's there in facebook, except for you. Join girlie and we will have a medium for butter gang to chit-chat :)

heavealie said...

lol pulsar came zooming out of nowhere!!keep writing!!

HaRy!! said...

Pulsar!! yapa sami...unoda creativity ku alave ila!

Vishnu said...

nalla twist..

vEnKy said...

Hmm good one

lostworld said...

Well written as usual Shruti, but honest confession from me - Not a lot of suspense. I did expect a bike or car ;-) Keep the stories coming.

Leo said...

hehehe!

end mein twist! :)

good write!

Neha said...

hmm, nice...again different one :)

Mr said...

Good funny one ! I would say the best and neat one of your 55F :)

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Mustaf said...

That was funny...totally unexpected :)

balasrini said...

Hey Shruti... Good one... Unexpected ending.... but gotto find a mistake... Pulsar is a definitely male bike ma... but u characterised as a feminine character... :-P

Swaram said...

LOL! Happened @ home too ;)

Bharathi said...

nice twist. I didnt expect it. Good.

Singh Amit said...

Nice one Shruti... :)
Nice twist.. :)
Cheers!!

Abdul said...

every 55f has a aurprise.. no surprise there's a surprise.. in essence it wasnt surprise.. standard format.. nothin can be done though.. inherent wit 55f.. the moment i saw the title i knew it was gonna be somthin like this..

and speakin abt replacin old bikes wit new hot ones i'm tempted to write an analogy.. owing to censorship issues i have to refrain.. :) nuf said..

Ekam said...

Hehe :D

Roshmi Sinha said...

Ha! Ha!

Well, the name is "Pulsar"... and perhaps sent his "pulse" racing... at the very sight of the much younger 'her'... What... ???

WELCOME TO MY WORLD OF POETRY: said...

Most amusing and such an unexpected ending. A good read.

Yvonne.

тнƨ [ƨcняɛι] said...

nice one--i thot he was gonna trade for a girl, but was a car--nice shock in the it was.. :D

Shruti said...

@Avada
Thanks re :)
facebook?Have to start another account for sure i guess! Let me do it :) Even venky is asking me to join :)

Shruti said...

@Heavealie
Welcome to my blog!
Thanks a ton :)

Shruti said...

@hary
Romba pugazhadha :P
Unna madhriye mokkaya think panrena?! :P

Shruti said...

@Vishnu
Mikka nandri :)

Shruti said...

@Venky
Hmmm..Thanks :)

Shruti said...

@rohitha
Cha, you expected this end eh?! then next time will write a much difficult one :)

Shruti said...

@Leo
Twist kaisa laga?!
Thanks :)

Shruti said...

@Neha
Thanks sweety!

Shruti said...

@Mr.R
I know that's a real compliment from you! Thanks a lot :)

Shruti said...

@Mustaf
Welcome back :)
Thanku!

Shruti said...

@Bala
Unakku mattum yen ipdi villathanama thonarthu?!

Shruti said...

@Swaram
Happened at your home :O

Shruti said...

@Bharathi
Thanks buddy! How about trying some cool, rib-tickling 55Fiction??

Shruti said...

@Amit
Thanks a lot amit ji!

Shruti said...

@Abdul
God, you started predicting my 55Fictions easily! I should change my writing skill atleast to challenge your instincts! Hey 55Fiction is like that, suspense and thrill makes it interesting! I think you don't like suspense!

Your analogy! *blinking*

Shruti said...

@Ekam
Heheheh :P

Shruti said...

@Roshmi
Arey yaar, aapki thinking achi hai! What an idea lady ji! Let us ask him abt his new sensual sensation :P :D

Shruti said...

@Yvonne
Thanks a lot lady! :)

Shruti said...

@тнƨ [ƨcняɛι]
Hey yaar! Pulsar is a bike...Not a car as you tell! :O

Miss_Nobody said...

haha,great!It could also have been a flat screen tv :P Ah,men!

balasrini said...

Unmaya sonna villathanama???

Netri kan thirappinum, kuttram kuttrame!!!

Shruti said...

@Miss Nobody
Hey sweety! Yes it can be a flat screen too :P

Shruti said...

@Bala
Nakeeraa!!!! (opening third eye :P)
Hey thoughits a male bike, it is the love for that guy! So she is the old bike and she felt for changing a new hottie!
Un pazhaya vandiyum, ipdithan, black color apache paathu feel pannum!

Sat_hi_sh said...

lolzz :D
The suspense was nicely placed.....



Keep blogging
cheers!!!

Shruti said...

@Sathish
Thanks a lot sathish :P

BK Chowla said...

Your posts are always full of fun and surprises.

balasrini said...

Nee pulsara cutie nu solli irukka... Cutie is feminine word... so thappu than madam....

Shruti said...

@Chowla Ji
Thanks and that's a real compliment!

Shruti said...

@Bala
Male bike ku andha thoughts vekka kudatha?!I have sen girls riding pulsar/splendor

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Shruti,

As i wrote a similar topic 'First Love' , a lengthy post in feb 2009, i did expect the ending.
It does nt mean that i am taking away the credits from you. You are adept at handling these things.
Expecting more U turns....

cheers,
mahi :)

Shruti said...

@Mahesh
Seriously I never know that you wrote a post on a similar topic!
But, thanks :)

Mahesh Kalaal said...

Hey Shruti ,

I am not saying that it is not original. I just wanted to share the coincidence. .
In Feb you even dont know about my small blog's existence.
Please yaar....... dont take it otherwise

cheers,
mahi :)

DayDreamer said...

LOLZ..great post..gud work Shruti..

:-)

The suspense was awesome..ha ha

Miss_Nobody said...

Hey girl,I have a li'l something for you on my blog,come on over!

Shashank Shekhar said...

hehehe... funny!!! good suspense!! :)

Shruti said...

@Mahesh
Hey mahi seriously, I never know you wrote such a kinda post in feb 2k9! Cos, i started blogging only from aug 2k9!

Shruti said...

@Dev
Welcome to my blog!
Thank you yaar :)

Shruti said...

@Miss Nobody
Hey sweety, thanks a lot for those awards! I am really happy!

Shruti said...

@Shashank
Hey thanks yaar :-)

Abdul said...

i sincerely feel u shud expand ur range.. maybe i'm getting used to 55f but its rather boring.. and ur stories abt 'girl in love who's dumped by a boy and she peps up in life' .. please.. enuf of those..
do svidania, the one abt an old man and the one abt the theif and his father are ur best works.. not jus bcos of the story but the style was good in the latter two..

as for ur love (or not so love) stories it has a touch of ingenuity here and there but love as such sucks.. the climax in ur last love story where the mom and girl talk.. that was brilliant.. explore more venues and styles..
read salman rushdie's midnight's children and d h lawrence's lady chatterley's lover.. the former for its brilliant writing style and the latter for such in depth discussion of seemingly non discussable topics.

Mahesh Kalaal said...

@ Shruti,

thats what i am saying baba...
Your writings are original....
I jus wanted to share my topic re....

Shruti said...

@Abdul
Yes, even I am willing to try different arena's! But tell me one thing! Are my stories, the love stories are stereotype? The one you mentioned,mom-daughter, in the beginning, you said you hate love stories, but I give different endings! But, when i hear you, it seems, am really writing some stupid stuffs!
Thanks re! Will definitely try to write a generalized article

Shruti said...

@Mahi
arey yaar! I understood it the moment I saw your comment! But wanted to make myself clear to you!
:)

Chetan said...

good one
again you did it beautifully

Shruti said...

@Chetan
HEy thanks :)

Darshan Chande said...

Haha... good suspense story... :P

Shruti said...

@Dharshan
Hey hi re :)
Welcome back :)
Thanks :P

The Aspirant said...

:P :P
u alwaz end sum suspense lyk dis......well a gud one

Shruti said...

@TA
Heheehehe :P :D
Thanks

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