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Thursday, December 17, 2009

55 Fiction - #27

Hiya buddies! Well, as the post name indicates, here comes my 26th 55 Fiction! So everyone knows what a 55Fiction is right?! So read the 55Fiction and let me know what you feel about it!

THE FINAL JOURNEY

Akash was enjoying his drive on a dark deserted highway. He was terrified and caused him massive heart attack, when he glanced in the rear view mirror. To his horror the vehicle following him had no driver!!
His last breath escaped when the driver of the right hand driven car overtook him.

With Love,

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63 comments:

lostworld said...

I smile too! :-)

Rajalakshmi Umapathy said...

Phew!! that was close:) enna oru horror.. nice..

Shruti said...

>>Lostworld
Even am smiling :D :) :P ;)

Shruti said...

>>Raji
Hey thanks girlie.. Paavam he died :(

Shilpa said...

This one was really nice!! See that even made me to post a comment. :P

Tell me, how do you get this idea? :p anyways, it was very good. But the poor fella died!! :(



shilpa

gils said...

haahah :D itha nee 110 word fictiona potrukalam..semma twist..hey unaku surutti nu per vachathu saria iruku :D endingla surutidra :D

Raj said...

lol. :P
you always cook up a curry dont you?

RamMmm said...

Thigil Kadhai 55er. Good twist.

Well, this can happen only in Europe. :-)

Shruti said...

>>Shilpz
So all the posts which you didn't comment was not upto the mark na?
Thank you..
Ideas? I saw an Italian Promo today in FB somewhere.. So wrote :)

Shruti said...

>>Gils
Hey Gilmananda, pera kola panrethuke unakku IPC section 32 la thooku thandanai kudukka mudivu panirkken :P

Twist-surutti...avvvv... Rammmm solrapla, ur creativity is reachin heights!!

Nandri :D

Shruti said...

>>Raj
Do I?? :P

Raj said...

tsk tsk you still dont know? :p

it nearly always gets a lump in my throat.

Vanessa said...

whhhhat a twist ..!!!

You inspired me to try my hand at 55fiction..:)

Shruti said...

>>Rammmm
I saw an advertisement of FIAT, whose makers are Italian.. So thought about writing this F55 :)
Konjam Dhigil, konjam facts, konjam twist=this F55

Shruti said...

>>Raj
:P :D
Lump in your throat? Interesting :D

Shruti said...

>>Vanessa
Welcome to H&M..
Thank you and after trying your hand in 55F, do let me know..
Keep visiting!

Raj said...

YOU BETTER FIND MY BLOG NOW. :P

Shruti said...

>>Raj
Searching for a long time :P Will find soon :D

Shilpa said...

Hey, its not like that. I normally like all your posts. But this idea was quite unique. :)

Shruti said...

>>Shilpz
I know very well girlie.. I am happy to see your comment in my blog :)

Neha said...

i think u should have written a short story on this...it would have been a nice horror story!

WELCOME TO MY WORLD OF POETRY: said...

Very good if not a wee bit spooky.
you have quite4e a talent for these stories. well done.

Yvonne,

Shruti said...

>>Neha
Is it?! I am not so good in writing horror stories!
Thanks Neha :)

Shruti said...

>>Yvonne
Thank you so much lady :)

Harini said...

jeez.. so he died in just 55 words... good one.

MindfulMeanderer said...

haha!! loved it. :)

evanescentthoughts said...

Hahaha. that was funny

Shruti said...

>>Harini
I killed him in 55words :P

Shruti said...

>>MM
Thank u girlie :)

Shruti said...

>>AK
:)
Thank u sweety!

Shas said...

Oh yes you killed him in 55 words flat as you said. A neat execution.

SiD said...

ouch... that hurts to the driver...:D


nice going...;)

Shruti said...

>>Shas
Thank u shas!! :)

Shruti said...

>>Sid
Are you that Ghost Driver?!

vEnKy said...

hey shruths awesome di. It is very rare i congratulate like this. This one really deserves it, well thought and witty. I would certainly rate it one of the best 55 F of yours if not the best

Makk said...

Aaila mien to free mien hi mar gaya..


he must thought when his soul escaped body trap. lollzzzzzz

Keep Smiling.

Sandeep Balan said...

hey shruti...first time here...impressed! :-)

some imagination...*pat on d back* :-)

Sat_hi_sh said...

Hey enaku puriyala pa :(
May be am not reading it right :(

anyways na busya ???????/
Appo neenga ?????...Yenoda blog pakkam neenga vandu romboooooooooooo naal achi pa ....

Paritosh said...

Hey Shruti,

Forgive me for being overtly critical, but I sincerely think this story needs a rewrite. Its an amazing concept but put together quite poorly (according to your standards). Hope you don't mind the cynical me barging in.

Paritosh

Roshmi Sinha said...

Nice one... what happened to the newly liberated soul... ???

Sorcerer said...

hmm..pretty cool one..

I wrote em too...
kinda weird.though

Rajlakshmi said...

ohh god girl you almost gave me an attack :P... very well written :)

kanagu said...

Enaku suthama puriyala... :(

Shruti said...

>>Venky
Hey thanks a lot buddy! But I find something still is missing from here!!

Shruti said...

>>Makk
Welcome here after a long time :)
LOL :P

Shruti said...

>>Sandeep
Welcome to H&M
Thank u! And am really glad that u are impressed!

Shruti said...

>>Satz
purilaya?!
Hey that guy is driving the car.. sudden ah rearview mirror la patha oru car comin without a driver! He thinks its a ghost.. But when the car overtakes him, he sees the driver in right side.. :)
Car have 2 types na? left hand drive and right hand drive! Thats what i used here!

ηανєєη said...

all incidents of horror are like that only ... if we dont get whats going on ... it becomes paranormal

though its quite impossible to see right hand n left hand cars both on the same road

Shruti said...

>>Paritosh
Thank u so much for criticizing this post! I liked your frank comment!! Even I felt some improvement is needed. But I dunno how to do it! That's why published as such. Infact I took a whole 3 hours to write this! The toughest of all my 55Fictions! U aren't cynical re, just giving me the inputs.. Please feel free to correct me..

U think of any possibilities?!

Shruti said...

>>Roshmi
Thank u! Newly liberated soul knocked the doors of heaven :P

Shruti said...

>>Sorcerer
Welcome to H&M
Thank u! I read urs too :D

Shruti said...

>>Rajlakshmi
Take meds girlie :P
Thank u!

Shruti said...

>>Kanagu
Again me repeating :)
Hey that guy is driving the car.. sudden ah rearview mirror la patha oru car comin without a driver! He thinks its a ghost.. But when the car overtakes him, he sees the driver in right side.. :)
Car have 2 types na? left hand drive and right hand drive! Thats what i used here!

Understood now?!

Shruti said...

>>Naveen
Right and left side cars can be seen in Europe :)

Bharathi said...

after that, the director said 'cut. cut'. both the actors from the car came alive.

see how I finished it very positive.


you need to see lots of Vijay movie to think of all those unbelievable twists.

Shruti said...

>>Bharathi
LOL :P
Vijay movie ah? Avvv... yen idha kolaveri?! Hunter patha effecto?!

Bharathi said...

Nah. I dont see his movies (atleast in theaters). I dont wanna be hunted.

But it seems its not that bad.

Shruti said...

>>Bharathi
U don wanna be hunted!? LOL!!

Ahhh?! Is it?! My friends asked me to give the money to a charity than watchin hunter :P

dilontherocks said...

Ohh...Very well written..I was laughing as well as feeling bad for the poor guy...

Mainak said...

lolzz! Kahani mein twist! And a really unexpected one!

Keep writing! Loved reading this post.

Shruti said...

>>Dil
Welcome to my blog!! Mixed emotions eh?! Even I felt such mixed thingie while reading my fellow bloggers comments! :P

Shruti said...

>>Mainak
Hi :)
Welcome to H&M
Thank u and keep coming in :)

Bala said...

Cool & funny fiction it is!!

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