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Sunday, February 21, 2010

55 Fiction - #33

55 Fiction is a form of micro fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.Most 55 Fiction works are dramatized so as to get the effect in limited time.

FINAL DESTINATION

He told his mom, "Mom, I bought a new house. We are going to vacate this house. Pack your things and get ready soon". She was exuberant.
The car sped off from the old building and stopped infront of a two-storey building. After donning her specs she read : S.P OLD AGE HOME Welcomes Everyone.

With Love,

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51 comments:

The Amateur Poet said...

hmm.. this was a sad 55 fiction.. bt happening a lot in real too. the destination was a sad one.

good strong 55 fic. we shd be caring for our parents not waiting to put them in some home where they are not cared for, well... not as much as we care for them anyways.

Guria said...

Strong and eloquent!!As you know, I'm afan of your 55-ers!! :)
Congrats on your 99th post!! Bring on more Dhamaka for your 100th!
Want your 99th 55er soon, too! :D

gils said...

ithu romba overu

WELCOME TO MY WORLD OF POETRY: said...

A situation that is happening all too often in the world. Your excellent write about it was awesome to read.......and all in 55 words.
Looking forward to your 100th.

Yvonne:

Urvashi said...

aww...tht is really a sad one...

though jus 55 words..the message is so effective....

i like the way u bring up social issues in ur fictions..keep writitng :)

vivek said...

Hmm , well written and message is clear n chrisp in 55 words... nice ..will read on...was a nice sweet lil read ..

kanagu said...

is this how a son will say when he sends his mom to oldage home???

shocking... :( :(

Karthikeyan S said...

Nice 55.. Nice Message!

All The Oldage Homes Should be Abolished!!

Bharathi said...

I really didnt expect this end. so sad but interesting story.

Gyanban said...

nice one Shruti -- for moment reminded me of Lage Raho....

RamMmm said...

You are hereby conferred the title of 'Queen of Pathos' in 55ers. :-( Your bright vs. pathos 55er ratio is approximately nil.

Cmon, can't there be bright and cheery 55ers?

Samadrita said...

This one's definitely among your best.Keep it up Shruti! :)

Mahesh Kalaal said...

touching and appealing ...
all the best for your 100th post :)

Aditya said...

A sad reality!

Rajlakshmi said...

aww that is so sad... brillianly written ...

ABHISHEK SiM said...

heart-breaking.

beautiful. a master-piece.

Saurabh Panshikar said...

touching...

But its not a fiction in many cases unfortunately :-(

Shas said...

A heart-breaking one. Hi! Howz u?

kasabiangirl said...

Well written...Will be back for your 100th post

Benny said...

hey nala iruku :) u hav written 33 55F ..awesome ! wil hav to read many I guess...wil do it soon

Harini said...

That was so mean of that guy. Seriously, how can he even do that. Anyways, a very touching and heart breaking one.

Shruti said...

>>Leo
Ty leo! But its a common sight that we witness everyday!

Shruti said...

>>Guria
Wow!! Welcome back!! Thank you!! You will see a real Dhamaka! 99th 55er is on its way :D

Shruti said...

>>Gils
Unmaya sonna makkal idhan solranga!

Shruti said...

>>Yvonne
Thank you lady!! You won't be disappointed in my 100th post :)

Shruti said...

>>Urvashi
Thank u so much girl!! 55 Fictions are more effective than long fictions!

Shruti said...

>>Vivek
Hey, Welcome to H&M and hope to see u here more often!! Ty :)

☆Tharangni☆ said...

wow! really nice!! :)
and hey, i really love all your 55 fictions and short stories! :)

Shruti said...

>>Kanagu
This is one of the way they will opt! I really can't understand how people are like this!

Shruti said...

>>KK
Yes they have to be.. But can they be?

Shruti said...

>>Bharathi
Thank you for your words.. These are some things which happen at unexpected times!

Shruti said...

>>Gyanban
Thank you! But reel life are impressed by real life happenings na!

Shruti said...

>>Rammm
Read some of my first 55F's :)
Social Issues cannot be handled in a cheerful way!

Shruti said...

>>Sammy
Thank u so much!

Shruti said...

>>Mahi
Ty mahi :)

Shruti said...

>>Adi
Yes, you are correct!

Shruti said...

>>Rajlaxmi
Thank u so much!! :)

Shruti said...

>>Abhi
Hey, thanks buddy :)

Shruti said...

>>Saurabh
Oye!! H r u!
Thank u!

Shruti said...

>>Shas
Hi girl.. Am fine.. How r u :)
Thanks for the visit!

Shruti said...

>>KG
Thank u KG! Gud to see you after a longggggg time :)

Shruti said...

>>Benny
Ooooo!! U have finally come! Wish u write a beautiful story!! Thank u :)

Shruti said...

>>Harini
Thanks girlie :) :)
But see na! people like that are around us!

Shruti said...

>>Tharangni
Wow!! Thank u sweety pie! Its a real surprise :)
Gud to have u here :)

vEnKy said...

why does the son say

" we are vacating the place"
Is the son gonna live in the old age home too?

"i have bought a new house"
Did he buy the old age home?

I know you are trying to keep the suspense but this is way too much dear

Shruti said...

>>Venky
Hahahaha :)
Too much lam illa.. fact :)

RamMmm said...

>>Rammm
Read some of my first 55F's :)
Social Issues cannot be handled in a cheerful way!

:-) I'll go and look at it some time. Issues are always negative (isn't it? and it is implicit unless you gain from it). Did I ask you to state social issues in a cheerful manner? Nope.
I only asked you to reduce gloomy posts. :-|

It is a tougher game to make someone smile than weep. One of your 55ers that I recollect off the top of my head is the Fiat ad influenced one. That WAS good and not pathos.

Keep up your neat work. You are creative and I would like to see cheery stuff from you as well and not remember you as one who always wallows in pathos. :-) [[Hopefully you won't come and hit me]]

Shruti said...

>>Rammm
Well I won't hit u! But u are right! I ll not make people cry :P

The Aspirant said...

well, again sumthing abt social world.....its so beautiful presented by you...
really, i can't understand hw cn a child does such a thing wid deir parents'....really sad..:(

Shruti said...

>>TA
They don't dare to do it! This is the reality!

Bala said...

Unexpected ending as usual… but also a sad one this time…

Old age is the time during which they crave for our time… but ppl always think the otherwise…

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