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Friday, February 12, 2010

55 Fiction - #32

55 Fiction is a form of micro fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.Most 55 Fiction works are dramatized so as to get the effect in limited time.

LOVE STORY

He picked his lifeless mobile, swirled it, pleading it to come to life. He was awaiting the response from her, for the proposal he made yesterday (a day before V-day)
Ring!
He grabbed the phone, cleared his throat and squeaked a hi. Bated Breath. Silence.
“Sir, do you have a HDFC credit card?"

With Love,

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51 comments:

Gyanban said...

Some people need to keep at it Vda or not - good post !

Raji U said...

I know... these telemarketing can be such a pain sometimes.. You will expecting an important call and they will disturb you so very badly..:)

Sat_hi_sh said...

Not ur best 55-fiction pa..
You could loads better...

keep blogging
cheers !!!

ABHISHEK SiM said...

poor guy

Karthikeyan S said...

Haiyo.. Adanga Maatiya??..

Unnai Pol Oruvan paathiya enna?? :)

HaRy!! said...

intha telemarketing thola thangala narayanaaa... kosu marunthu adichi kolunga pa!

Mr said...

Ha Ha he better accepts it :P what if she accepts his proposal and he decides to splurge on ;)

- Lakshmi Rajan

GingerChai.com

P.S > Finally i managed Sid to open his name/url option now i think I should make u do it :P OPEN IT.

The Amateur Poet said...

lol :D kahaani mein twisht ;)

ya, these marketing ppl call at the most innoportune moments! hope he get the right call soon! :D

WELCOME TO MY WORLD OF POETRY: said...

Very clevery written. well done.

Yvonne.

Rajlakshmi said...

lolzzz these telemarketing guys always chosse the wrong moment :)

Raksha Raman said...

Oh oh! Comedy of error! Comedy when it happens to others and tragedy when it happens to us! ;) LOL!

Aditya said...

lol lol. Poor guy. By the way, it isn't any mistake of that marketing guy too. Being a marketing guy, I understand their pain ;)

RamMmm said...

:-) nice twist, happens usually, but the realist that I am, wouldn't the guy have her number(s) on his mobile, especially that he has gone to the extent of proposing and almost every mobile owner uses caller ID? You can <Grrr> and laugh it off saying she may call from a PCO or from a friend's or a new number for a surprise. :-)

Tavish Chadha said...

lol... poor fellow... nice one Shruti! :)

--Tavish
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Saurabh Panshikar said...

he he! when you least expect it!

I heard this one that a hot shot doctor got a call from some telemarketer...

He said "Madam I'm in the middle of a surgery and now if anything goes wrong, I'm gonna sue you"

He never heard from them again!

kasabiangirl said...

Nice twist! Enjoyed reading your 55 fiction :)

The Aspirant said...

Dats really funny one........even d most calm person loses his patience at such situations......:P

kanagu said...

Nice one Shruti... :) :) joined in the company???

kdpgrahi said...

A very god post I enjoyed. Well done Shruti.

Urvashi said...

awww...credit card... :(

poor guy... ;) ;)

ANWESA said...

awwwwwwwwwwwwww....

Makk said...

i was about to write...

Anwesha's ..reaction...

lollzzz

Harini said...

Poor guy!! I was waiting for my friend to call up with result and my phone ran and i picked up... it turned out to be vodafone with a stupid offer :P.

Dhiman said...

Credit card co. calling means recession is over Now that's Good News...isn't it:D

Shruti said...

>>Gyanban
Thank u :)

Shruti said...

>>Raji
Yes!! They can be PIA sometimes :P

Shruti said...

>>Satz
Wish I could ^_^

Shruti said...

>>Abhishek
Welcome Back after a long time :)
Yes he is!

Shruti said...

>>KK
UPO is nt on this storyline :P

Shruti said...

>>Hary
Aiiii!! Annatha sound lam bayangarama irukku!!

Shruti said...

>>Chaiwala
LOL ;P
Btw, Wordpress readers are poncing on me for changing to name/url option!!

Shruti said...

>>Vinay
Yeah, Just think of his position na!! Poor guy :P

Shruti said...

>>Yvonne
Thanks lady :)

Shruti said...

>>Rajlakshmi
:P
Yes! They are like that!

Shruti said...

>>Raksha
:P yes sweetie :)

Shruti said...

>>Aditya
Oye! Adi s back or just a visit to blogs? Anyway am happy :)
Thanks :)

Shruti said...

>>Rammmmm
you told all the possibilities! Also, I dint Grrr or laugh it off! But this is just a fiction :)

Shruti said...

>>Tavish
Thank u so much!

Shruti said...

>>Saurabh
:P
The joke u mentioned was too good.. Wish I could tell something like that to all the calls i receive!

Shruti said...

??KG
Welcome back girlie :)
Ty :)

Shruti said...

>>TA
U r right :)

Shruti said...

>>Kanagu
Not yet ma... Still vetti :)

Shruti said...

>>KDPGrahi
Welcome to my blog :)
Thank u so much :)

Shruti said...

>>Urvashi
Indeed very poor :P

Shruti said...

>>Annwesa
I just smiled at ur reaction :)

Shruti said...

>>Makk
:) :)

Shruti said...

>>Harini
everyone of us has such experiences :)

Shruti said...

>>Dhiman
Arey... U completely gave a new dimension to the entire story :)

Sandy said...

Simply great!! I liked this post!!

Cheers!!

Shruti said...

>>Sandy
Thank u re and welcome to H&M

Bala said...

Gud one:)

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