Thursday, January 7, 2010

A New Life - 2

You have read the first part of this story in my last post and this is the concluding part.. Hope you enjoy reading it.. To read the first part, Click here. Am really happy that many liked the first part and eagerly wait for the sequel. Here it is unfolding..

Riya called the office and said that both of them are taking the rest of the day off. She held Tara's hand throughout the taxi ride, back home. Once she opened the doors of her house, Tara broke down. Tears freely flowed from her eyes. Her tears knew no bound. As her tears broke all boundaries Riya held her in her arms. She rocked the shivering frame of Tara in her arms as she would do when her little daughters cried. She knew how to console them, but here she didn't. So she just held her and let her weep her heart out. She strongly believed that tears can make her feel light.

Riya left at about seven in the evening. Her husband had called her thrice since her kids had fever. By then Tara had stopped crying and she asked Riya to leave. She actually kicked Riya out with the promise that she would call her every hour and that she’d pick up her calls. Krish had called at some point and said he will be late. Riya spoke with him. But Tara didn't want him to know the results till he reach home.

Now she was alone. She was completely blank about the results doctor gave. The questions how, where, when, why ran through her head. Her head started banging. She bundled the free flowing hairs, wiped her face and got out of the couch. Now a little more cleared she stood at the kitchen counter with a cup of coffee and thought back. She thought about every injection she had taken. That should be the only way. She had never had transfusion and she was a faithful wife. And she trusted Krish. The doctor had said he should be tested too.

It frustrated her. She still didn’t know how. Infact she started doubting the results. Her mind kept telling her the only way it could have happened. Her heart kept denying it. No, her heart screamed each time her brain with all its resources said, Krish.

That night as the rain poured down, Krish entered his apartment completely drenched, calling out, "Tara where are you?! Why didn't you switch on the lights? Get me a towel na, am drenched".As he switched on the light he saw Tara sitting with a blank expression on the divan. He walked towards her, talking to her. He laid his hands on her shoulder, turned her towards him and told, "Tara.... Tara... What happened to you?". Tara’s ears only registered the rain. She freed herself from him and moved away silently wiping her tears. She showed him her report. He sat down and read it. Tears glistened at the edge of his eyes. He looked at her. She held her tears back and with her eyes and her soul asked him to say no. He just sat there with the tears that did not fall.

She stood up wiping her tears, picked her packed bag and walked towards the door. He ran behind her, trying to stop her. He stopped her as she opened the door. He said " Am sorry Tara. We should talk. Come to our house. Please Tara..". As she waited for the lift, he kept begging her to come in. As the lift doors started closing she muttered, "Go to a doctor Krish”. As the rain water hit down the taxi window, it secretly hid her tears that were flowing uncontrollably along the window pane too.

It has been three years since then. Tara is on medication. She cannot do a number of things herself. She has to take care of infections, even the normal cold’s. She works from home. Its not because colleagues in her office have an issue, its because it gives her time to do all the other things she is doing for herself. Even then she still has at least one fight with her boss everyday. That makes her relax a bit. She works with an orphanage for special kids. They are the kids with HIV- positive status. Kids who probably did not have too long to live. Kids love her. Krish had left her his life’s earnings before he passed away. It has been three months since his decease. Now she uses that money to help these kids realize their small dreams before their eyes close to a dreamless sleep.

~~~THE END~~~

P.S : Now do you accept this is a story that happens to someone near us?

With Love,

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53 comments:

  1. A sad state of affairs and poignant (non) story. Could happen to anyone. Trust goes straight out of the window in cases like this. The worst hit are the people or children who carry it for no fault of theirs and also being unaware of the same until they wither away to non-existence. But to be fair statistically, however miniscule it might be, it is not just indiscretion on either partner (which probably is 99% of the cause), but factors like a messed up blood transfusion, improper habits (intravenous syringe usage for drugs) that are also causes.

    At least for the sake of the innocents, hopefully some vaccine is invented that is effective against HIV.

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  2. Hey shruthi, sad ending. I just dont understand men, y are they like this? Its unfortunate and unbelievable.. but in my sister's case she will never able to bear any baby because of her fragile condition. So the couple has planned to adopt a baby- A girl. :)

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  3. !! athu yen oscar padam mathirye kathai ezhuthara! semma heavy and sogams of indiava iruku!! konjam lighta ezhuthungo ammani..mudiala...nice story..aana semma heavy

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  4. Nice one. Well written.

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  5. I told you ....that i had ma doubts..

    SUPERB..

    Your narration made it breath taking.


    but my answer to your question is yes.

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  6. >>Rammm
    U are very correct! The innocents are also affected by these. Hope a vaccine comes out soon for this syndrome!

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  7. >>Raji
    Hey girl, in this case I have portrayed men as culprit.. But on the real life, it can be women too :(

    And regarding your sissie, am really happy for their decision and my best wishes for them! Its nt a easy decision. It really needs a broad outlook :)
    Cheers :)

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  8. >>Gils
    Hey sure.. Will try to vary my genres :)
    Thank u!

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  9. >>Makk
    U guessed this ending? Wow amazing :)
    Thank u for all those good words!

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  10. >>Abdul
    After a long time na?! Happy new year :)
    Thank u :)

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  11. The way u Narrated is really good!!

    Nice One..

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  12. >>Karthikeyan
    Hey thanks a ton :)

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  13. Phew!Akka! Now that was really one nice story!
    Very well written! :)

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  14. Chancea ilae pa.......
    Kalakita po...
    Rombo touchinga irundhadhu ,gr8 work from u :)

    Keep this up...
    cheers!!!

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  15. Hi Shruthi
    Here for the second instalment and I have to agree a much better reading than the first. I am no good writer but as a reader I will tell you. You have a long way to go, this post has sure showed some very positive writing, do keep writing more and often then come to both the parts after a few months and you will know exactly what was lacking :)

    - harsha
    www.ithinkiknowbut.blogspot.com

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  16. >>Satz
    Hey thank u re :)
    Great work ah?! Nope, my best work is yet 2 come :)

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  17. >>Harsha
    Hey buddy I told na I will surely show you improvement :)
    I can understand the point you mentioned here. Now, when I read the first post I wrote, I will find it amateurish.. The same is applicable for all :)

    Thank u!

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  18. Amazingly well written :)
    Simple yet powerful ...
    Keep writing and Smiling :)

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  19. >>Arnav
    Hey thanks buddy! Happy new year to you!

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  20. Hi...

    The narration in parts is excellent....
    I feel you can edit few lines or improvise....
    As usual, your dealing of emotions is real and impacting....
    I do appreciate u for the theme and the way you have ended it....
    I found 2nd part more interesting....
    I do support you in selecting such happening social issues as blog posts....
    Keep exploring the social domain....
    You have the ability to take the issues in a touching way...
    Am glad that you wrote it....

    Have green blogging.... :)

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  21. gripping !! cud happen to anyone..... awareness romba mukiyam!! sema kathai...was waiting for yur post actual ah...hey nama deal ena achi?

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  22. but.. when she was thinkin from where she cud have contracted it she though of transfusion and the likes... but when she comes to think abt from where he cud hav contracted it, he did not even have the benefit of doubt..

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  23. >>Mahi
    Hey thanks a lot buddy! The first part is just the explanation of the scenario! The second part has the entire story :)

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  24. >>Hary
    Waiting for my post eh!? So nice to hear that :)
    Thanks a ton re :) Namma deal ah?! Ne OL la ye kaanom! Nan yenna pana?! U r keeping mum :(

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  25. >>Abdul
    Did u read the story completely? That guy did the mistake and thatsy she left! He even knew 'that' RELATIONSHIP would have caused her this disease! Read the story again, you will understand t!

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  26. i understand that..but hw does she confirm that he conracted it thru another relationship.. she asks him nothin.. jus leaves.. wat if he had contracted thru transfusion??

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  27. Simple yet powerful. Well written...

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  28. >>Abdul
    Yeah, if he got it from transfusion, why should he keep mum? She waited for him to confess na? When he dint its an understood fact

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  29. very well written Shruti... and a very good ending too.. :) :)

    kept me hooked... :)

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  30. >>kanagu
    Really?! Thanks a ton buddy :)

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  31. yes.. thats the truth... naan than unmaya thavara ethayume pesurathu illaye... :P :P

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  32. i had three possible ending in my mind.

    and I had ma doubts this time that you will not go by those lines.

    and this time you came up as winner

    i didn't think of this one.

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  33. >>Kanagu
    Neenga unmaya thavara yellathayume pesuvenga nu I know :P

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  34. >>Makk
    Hey, what are the other possibilities u thought off?

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  35. wow shruti. the second part surpassed first one in terms of the suspense level. I just dint guess the ending. I kept thinking maybe she was pregnant or something :D Kudos!!!! Narration was too good :) loved it

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  36. >>AK
    U thought she was pregnant :P LOL AK! Ur imagination surpasses everything :P

    Thank u, thank u and many thanks to u!

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  37. d second part dusn't appeal much to me.........may b i alwaz xpect sumthing weird frm u nd dis tym straight things come out dat r nt easily digested......
    still a f9 plot....

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  38. >>TA
    U expect weird things from me?! :P
    Thanks re :)

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  39. yeah.......not my mistake coz u have a sting in d tail alwaz...
    nw if u start writing sumthing straight den wads my mistake :P

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  40. >>TA
    I never knew I keep a sting in the end! Mebbe u read too many 55F's! Cos, I keep the suspense only in them! But many of my short stories are easily predictable!

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  41. Nice work re. I see you have a simple and direct style of writing and it goes down well with this simple plot involving the couple with HIV. What I like this piece had no frills, was engaging and was, as you put it, could-happen-to-anyone-near-us. Great going!
    By the way, I absolutely love your signature at the end of posts :D

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  42. >>Daone
    Hi Daone, welcome to H&M
    Thank u so much! I wish to write stories plain and simple.. Its a thing which can happen to anyone near us!

    I love my signature too :)
    Keep Visiting :)

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  43. Nice finish...I think your narrative gained momentum towards middle of Life 2 - as a reader I went through a myriad of emotions, went up and down all the way.
    My only recommendation -the ambiance description was higher than the narrative..maybe it needs a touch balance.

    But then you are the best judge of your content and delivery.

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  44. >>Gyanban
    Yeah, it was intentional! The momentum should be infact intense in the second part. Because that is needed for the story.
    Yeah, after seeing your comment, I infact read the story again and found it! Yeah, the narration of the ongoing emotions should be high too!

    Though am a judge of my contents, its you, my readers who can tell me where do i lack!

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  45. Really great Shruti!!! Completely unexpected u have given in this 2nd part…

    I guessed the way that her husband might be having some medical problem with regard to her pregnancy…

    But her thoughts about blood transfusion brought out ur climax…
    But a noble theme indeed… I appreciate you really for taking up this issue…

    Many innocents are falling prey to such heartless people…

    Hope & Pray that this happens to no-one else…

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