Here is my next 55 Fiction.
Those who are new to this concept, understand what is 55Fiction!? 55 Fiction is a form of micro fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.Most 55 Fiction works are dramatized so as to get the effect in limited time.
THE MISSION
Everything was set. Darkness facilitated him. The door creaked and he heard her footsteps. He geared up for his mission. He yelled after a cockroach bit him. That moment, the trigger clicked and he detected the trickling of blood from his chest. He muttered, "I shouldn't have planned a surprise party for a cop."
Sorry for giving a tragic end yet again. Next time will write a different genre.
Hope you liked this. Please do comment on this 55 fiction attempt!
With Love,
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A bit obscure but I think I got it....
ReplyDeletethe man had planned a surprise for the woman and she, since was a cop, shot him dead instead, not realising the truth.....
am I correct...
u wrote it well...
its tough to imbibe emotions with so few words but u were somehow successful....
Ayyooo...:(..soo sad ..
ReplyDeleteBut very nicely expressed ..Thanks for this shruti ..:)
@RSV
ReplyDeleteyou hit the bulls eye!
you decoded it correctly and call it obscure :O
Somehow successful eh?
Thanks re!
@Prams
ReplyDelete""very nicely expressed""
Thanks a ton :)
I thought moral of the story was "Surprise kept for others sometime surprise you only"!! Didn't realize it was "she" who was a cop,until i read the comment. So thanks both to the author and the commentor :)
ReplyDelete@Mustaf
ReplyDeleteOMG!!
I couldn't make myself clear with this 55Fiction!
Am sorry!!
this is the reason I hate surprises...bol do yaar jo bhi plan hai wo...why take a chance?
ReplyDeletenice write up, and keep it ths way only...I love tragic climax :D
Got confused a bit though...
ReplyDeleteWhy did the cop shoot...
:)
waise, therez no questions asked in fiction..i know ..i know..!!
was blog hopping and ended up here..!!
:)
I like reading comments more thn the post .. so every pun intended to the ONE who didn't understand this, go back to nursery rhymes ! ;) LOL
ReplyDeleteAttempt, was it ... ? 55 or even less, I know now, you can express your mind in 10 words ! :)
And yeah you gave me a lesson for life .. cockroaches and cops (read:woman) shouldn't be surprised, one bites and the other one kills ! :P
You do not need to be sorry, I might be a dumb enough!!:)
ReplyDeleteI think this is awesome! :D
ReplyDeleteWhere is the tragedy? Think like the bullet nipping his shoulder!
I think it is funny! After all no one actually died! lol...
P.S. you can also call me the maverick girl! lol...
I enjoyed it ... :)
ReplyDeletevery nicely written ...:)
Cheers!!
i dint understan anythin... :(
ReplyDeletebut i liked the concept 55 fiction. m new to tat.. :D
u made this concept or wat??
haf fun
Anoop
lolz i think he learnt the perils of surprise in a harsh way :)
ReplyDeletenalla 55-ficiton work madam :)
try some 55-ficition for mamiyar & marumagal :D
anyways was just fine tuning my post the other day adan slept really late...
neengalum night birdie eh ????
was it tamil nadu police....if it was the case then he wud have escaped, considering they never shoot the target :)! neeyum unoda karpanayum :)
ReplyDeleteHaRy
Hiiii!!
ReplyDeleteI've been busy but here I am..
Great writing .. :) Liked this story.
Yes, some happy stories next please..
i dont know i kind of felt good:)..he he..:)...enjoyed reading it:)..nice twist:)
ReplyDelete@Neha
ReplyDeleteyou are a tragic lover eh?!
Most of my works are like that!!
hehehe!!
:P
@Vinz
ReplyDeleteWelcome to my blog yaar :)
Confused eh?!
:O
U read rahul's comment,he would have explained!!
U can ask questions and i will try to reply them :)
Keep Visiting!
Very well written with a twist.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
@Sourav
ReplyDeleteWelcome back to my blog after a long time :)
""who didn't understand this, go back to nursery rhymes""
Oh migh!! :P
""I know now, you can express your mind in 10 words""
Heheeh... can i?? ;)
@Mustaf
ReplyDeleteI wanna write things in a way which everyone can understand!
But it wasn't like what i thought!
@Guria
ReplyDeleteTragedy becomes funny only for a misfit girl and you proved it! ;)
@Amit
ReplyDeleteYou enjoyed it eh?
Am really glad about it!
@Anoop
ReplyDelete""i dint understan anythin""
Oh my god!
See the backdrop of this story is, like rahul penned in comments : the man had planned a surprise for the woman and she, since was a cop, shot him dead instead, not realising the truth
I dint make this concept. I took up a already existing concept and started writing!
@Sathish
ReplyDeleteaama, uyire poiruthu!! :P
Maamiyar marumagal ah!!
:P
Night birdie num sollalam, raa pisasu num sollalam!
@hary
ReplyDeleteIlla, scotland yard police!
Adan vecha kuri thapala :)
""neeyum unoda karpanayum""
Avlo mosama irukka :(
@Lostworld
ReplyDeleteWelcome back!!!
Thanks and surely next time will write happy endings!
@Yellow tulip!
ReplyDeleteYou enjoyed it eh!
Wow, thank you!!
@yvonne
ReplyDeletethank you!!
Nice cop story hehehee
ReplyDeletegood keep rocking
Regards,
Prasee
@Prasee
ReplyDeleteThanks :)
Nice one.It was strangely humorous.:P
ReplyDelete"Next time will write a different genre."
Awaiting your next post :P
Btw do check out my new post! :)
Subtleness irukkalam ana ivalo va. Ana cocroach bite panni trigger click aage he shot himself ellam too over.
ReplyDeleteHahahaha......he was "surprised" by the cockroach!!!!
ReplyDeleteThen got "surprised" by the bullet.
Great one.
Queen rulz.
I enjoyed it. But I had to read it twice. I swear I hadn't read Rahul's comment by then :D
ReplyDeleteSo I don't need to go back to nursery :D
@Anu
ReplyDeletehehehe!!
don't expect too much from me re!!
Thanks!
Will check ma :)
@Venky
ReplyDeleteavane shoot panikala!
See,a man organises a surprise party for this gal who s a cop. EVerything was set in dark! The moment cockroach bit him and the gal opens door happens simultaneously! She suspects him 2 b a crimanl in dark and she shoots him!!
this s the story!
@IP
ReplyDeleteQueen rules eh?!
Heheh :P
Thank you!
@Ekam
ReplyDeleteOh migh!
you enjoed it eh! Thanks a ton! So u need not goto nursery :P
@ Shruthi
ReplyDeleteBeware of copraoches hehehe
@Venky
ReplyDeleteUn creativity ku alave illama pochu!!
BTW,copraoches was good!!
Actually i spelled wrong it is Coproaches. hehehe
ReplyDeleteHmmm...
ReplyDeletemoral of the story : if your wife's a cop,don't try to surprise her!!!
shilpa
Every time when I read your 55Fiction it's make me more big fan of your writing. Very Humrous story.
ReplyDeleteKeep it up madam...
:)
I think you are facinated by this 55 fiction, but yes no doubt all are good, including this one
ReplyDeleteWhat a tragedy!!
ReplyDelete@Venky
ReplyDeleteSebba, porum pa :)
@Shilpa
ReplyDelete""if your wife's a cop,don't try to surprise her!""
Lolzz :P
@Vijay
ReplyDelete""when I read your 55Fiction it's make me more big fan of your writing""
Hey really am sooo happy to learn about it!
Am not so old :O
Don't cal me madam, jus cal me shruti!
Thanks :)
@Chetan
ReplyDeleteit is true that i like writing 55Fcition!
""no doubt all are good, including this one""
Thanks a ton!
@Paritosh
ReplyDeleteYes it is! But many find it to be comical!
@ Vijay
ReplyDeleteBuddy this comedy story tradegy man, lives sorry a life was lost.
@ Shruthi
sorry for hacking you comment reply. i like doing it so much ;)
@Venky
ReplyDeleteIdhellam oru polappa!
Aiyo aiyo!
@Shruthi
ReplyDeletehey one last time ok last time in this comment section, I swear
@ Vijay
Buddy how did you to do that fancy thingy for your it looks good chap.
@Venky
ReplyDeleteada pavi! Idha chat section ah maathitaye!
Adhu character map la poi pananum!
Start-->Programs-->Accessories--->System tools--->Character map!
Your twist in tales has improved a lot dear...and hey..yeah actually he should have avoided cops totally if he was any wiser...:D
ReplyDelete@Sid
ReplyDeletemy twists have improved eh!!
thanks siddhu!
Some people are taking my suggestion to go back to nursery rhymes pretty seriously ! ;)
ReplyDelete@Ekam .. *sigh* you are promoted to Class I ! :P
@Shruti .. yes, you can !
hey Shruti
ReplyDeletedo help me out yaar.
does the comment system really giving a lot of problems??
should I change it?
RSV
Good one again girl! hehe.. poor guy giving surprises to a cop :))
ReplyDelete@Sourav
ReplyDeleteWill try next time :P
@RSV
ReplyDeleteYes yaar!!
I am not able to post the comment!! :(
@Avada
ReplyDeleteHehehehe :P
Thanks :)
well...I am new this concept called 55, have seen few.
ReplyDeleteThis is one is cold.. I would say!!
very nice. i liked it. it had an element of surprise
ReplyDeleteHI Shruti,
ReplyDeleteThis is to inform u that u have been awarded at my blog..plz collect the same and make me happy :)
@Makk
ReplyDeleteWelcome to this blog!
Thanks a ton and glad that you liked it!!
Keep visiting!
@Prams
ReplyDeleteYep sure :)
Thanks a ton!
@Bharathi
ReplyDeleteBharathi liked my 55Fiction!!
Yipeeee!!!
Thanks!
Nice one!
ReplyDeletebut Konjam logic idikudhu!
@Srivatsan
ReplyDeleteLogic idikartha?!
Yenga? Idikartha thallitu paru, kanakku sari ah irukkum
Ohhh :( U r too gud with the 55-ers though!
ReplyDelete@Swaram
ReplyDeleteThanks!
Shruti! a black comedy (guess this is your first one of this genre). Got to re-read to makeout (please don't send me to nursary).
ReplyDeleteGood read Shruti :)
@Musings
ReplyDeleteYes you guessed it right!! Don't goto nursery! Learn from ur kid :P
DO cockroaches bite?
ReplyDelete@Shankz
ReplyDeleteYes they bite :)
Gud one!
ReplyDeleteThriller kind of fiction... Glad that you write in all genres...
@Bala
ReplyDeleteThanks! Trying in different genre is the best part of a writer! What say!?
Nah!!! It's the part of a best writer!!! So you are a best writer!!!
ReplyDelete@Bala
ReplyDeleteIs it so?!
Thanks bala :)
Yes Shruti! I mean it!
ReplyDelete@Bala
ReplyDeleteAm flattered!!
I just said the truth... not for flattering you... :-)
ReplyDelete@Bala
ReplyDeleteNandri :)