Hey buddies, hi! So how is the week going on.. Here is my 21st fiction! Understand what is 55Fiction!? 55 Fiction is a form of micro fiction that refers to the works of fiction limited to a maximum of fifty-five words.Most 55 Fiction works are dramatized so as to get the effect in limited time. So here goes my 55Fiction
MY FIRST LOVE
She knew age was catching up on her. She no longer possessed the beauty and liveliness that once won his heart. Every passing day increased her insecurities. How could he forget all the time they spent together? And then, the day arrived. He traded her in for cutie, the much younger impact-Black color Pulsar.
P.S:How is the suspense element in this Fiction?
With Love,
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he..he... that was funny......
ReplyDelete@Shankz
ReplyDelete:P
Thanks :)
lol...pulsar aa....nice ending..:)
ReplyDelete@Kaka
ReplyDeletePulsar dan :P
Thanks
That was funny :)
ReplyDeleteKeep writing!
Nice one Shruti :) the suspense in the end is good and unexpected one :)
ReplyDelete@CB
ReplyDeleteThanks Girl :)
@Kanagu
ReplyDeleteThanks re :)
Hehe.. this was good :))) I really dint expect this ending for sure! A very good one queen..
ReplyDeleteHey why dont you join facebook? It's fun there..everyone's there in facebook, except for you. Join girlie and we will have a medium for butter gang to chit-chat :)
lol pulsar came zooming out of nowhere!!keep writing!!
ReplyDeletePulsar!! yapa sami...unoda creativity ku alave ila!
ReplyDeletenalla twist..
ReplyDeleteHmm good one
ReplyDeleteWell written as usual Shruti, but honest confession from me - Not a lot of suspense. I did expect a bike or car ;-) Keep the stories coming.
ReplyDeletehehehe!
ReplyDeleteend mein twist! :)
good write!
hmm, nice...again different one :)
ReplyDeleteGood funny one ! I would say the best and neat one of your 55F :)
ReplyDelete- Lakshmi Rajan
www.gingerchai.com
That was funny...totally unexpected :)
ReplyDeleteHey Shruti... Good one... Unexpected ending.... but gotto find a mistake... Pulsar is a definitely male bike ma... but u characterised as a feminine character... :-P
ReplyDeleteLOL! Happened @ home too ;)
ReplyDeletenice twist. I didnt expect it. Good.
ReplyDeleteNice one Shruti... :)
ReplyDeleteNice twist.. :)
Cheers!!
every 55f has a aurprise.. no surprise there's a surprise.. in essence it wasnt surprise.. standard format.. nothin can be done though.. inherent wit 55f.. the moment i saw the title i knew it was gonna be somthin like this..
ReplyDeleteand speakin abt replacin old bikes wit new hot ones i'm tempted to write an analogy.. owing to censorship issues i have to refrain.. :) nuf said..
Hehe :D
ReplyDeleteHa! Ha!
ReplyDeleteWell, the name is "Pulsar"... and perhaps sent his "pulse" racing... at the very sight of the much younger 'her'... What... ???
Most amusing and such an unexpected ending. A good read.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
nice one--i thot he was gonna trade for a girl, but was a car--nice shock in the it was.. :D
ReplyDelete@Avada
ReplyDeleteThanks re :)
facebook?Have to start another account for sure i guess! Let me do it :) Even venky is asking me to join :)
@Heavealie
ReplyDeleteWelcome to my blog!
Thanks a ton :)
@hary
ReplyDeleteRomba pugazhadha :P
Unna madhriye mokkaya think panrena?! :P
@Vishnu
ReplyDeleteMikka nandri :)
@Venky
ReplyDeleteHmmm..Thanks :)
@rohitha
ReplyDeleteCha, you expected this end eh?! then next time will write a much difficult one :)
@Leo
ReplyDeleteTwist kaisa laga?!
Thanks :)
@Neha
ReplyDeleteThanks sweety!
@Mr.R
ReplyDeleteI know that's a real compliment from you! Thanks a lot :)
@Mustaf
ReplyDeleteWelcome back :)
Thanku!
@Bala
ReplyDeleteUnakku mattum yen ipdi villathanama thonarthu?!
@Swaram
ReplyDeleteHappened at your home :O
@Bharathi
ReplyDeleteThanks buddy! How about trying some cool, rib-tickling 55Fiction??
@Amit
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot amit ji!
@Abdul
ReplyDeleteGod, you started predicting my 55Fictions easily! I should change my writing skill atleast to challenge your instincts! Hey 55Fiction is like that, suspense and thrill makes it interesting! I think you don't like suspense!
Your analogy! *blinking*
@Ekam
ReplyDeleteHeheheh :P
@Roshmi
ReplyDeleteArey yaar, aapki thinking achi hai! What an idea lady ji! Let us ask him abt his new sensual sensation :P :D
@Yvonne
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot lady! :)
@тнƨ [ƨcняɛι]
ReplyDeleteHey yaar! Pulsar is a bike...Not a car as you tell! :O
haha,great!It could also have been a flat screen tv :P Ah,men!
ReplyDeleteUnmaya sonna villathanama???
ReplyDeleteNetri kan thirappinum, kuttram kuttrame!!!
@Miss Nobody
ReplyDeleteHey sweety! Yes it can be a flat screen too :P
@Bala
ReplyDeleteNakeeraa!!!! (opening third eye :P)
Hey thoughits a male bike, it is the love for that guy! So she is the old bike and she felt for changing a new hottie!
Un pazhaya vandiyum, ipdithan, black color apache paathu feel pannum!
lolzz :D
ReplyDeleteThe suspense was nicely placed.....
Keep blogging
cheers!!!
@Sathish
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot sathish :P
Your posts are always full of fun and surprises.
ReplyDeleteNee pulsara cutie nu solli irukka... Cutie is feminine word... so thappu than madam....
ReplyDelete@Chowla Ji
ReplyDeleteThanks and that's a real compliment!
@Bala
ReplyDeleteMale bike ku andha thoughts vekka kudatha?!I have sen girls riding pulsar/splendor
@ Shruti,
ReplyDeleteAs i wrote a similar topic 'First Love' , a lengthy post in feb 2009, i did expect the ending.
It does nt mean that i am taking away the credits from you. You are adept at handling these things.
Expecting more U turns....
cheers,
mahi :)
@Mahesh
ReplyDeleteSeriously I never know that you wrote a post on a similar topic!
But, thanks :)
Hey Shruti ,
ReplyDeleteI am not saying that it is not original. I just wanted to share the coincidence. .
In Feb you even dont know about my small blog's existence.
Please yaar....... dont take it otherwise
cheers,
mahi :)
LOLZ..great post..gud work Shruti..
ReplyDelete:-)
The suspense was awesome..ha ha
Hey girl,I have a li'l something for you on my blog,come on over!
ReplyDeletehehehe... funny!!! good suspense!! :)
ReplyDelete@Mahesh
ReplyDeleteHey mahi seriously, I never know you wrote such a kinda post in feb 2k9! Cos, i started blogging only from aug 2k9!
@Dev
ReplyDeleteWelcome to my blog!
Thank you yaar :)
@Miss Nobody
ReplyDeleteHey sweety, thanks a lot for those awards! I am really happy!
@Shashank
ReplyDeleteHey thanks yaar :-)
i sincerely feel u shud expand ur range.. maybe i'm getting used to 55f but its rather boring.. and ur stories abt 'girl in love who's dumped by a boy and she peps up in life' .. please.. enuf of those..
ReplyDeletedo svidania, the one abt an old man and the one abt the theif and his father are ur best works.. not jus bcos of the story but the style was good in the latter two..
as for ur love (or not so love) stories it has a touch of ingenuity here and there but love as such sucks.. the climax in ur last love story where the mom and girl talk.. that was brilliant.. explore more venues and styles..
read salman rushdie's midnight's children and d h lawrence's lady chatterley's lover.. the former for its brilliant writing style and the latter for such in depth discussion of seemingly non discussable topics.
@ Shruti,
ReplyDeletethats what i am saying baba...
Your writings are original....
I jus wanted to share my topic re....
@Abdul
ReplyDeleteYes, even I am willing to try different arena's! But tell me one thing! Are my stories, the love stories are stereotype? The one you mentioned,mom-daughter, in the beginning, you said you hate love stories, but I give different endings! But, when i hear you, it seems, am really writing some stupid stuffs!
Thanks re! Will definitely try to write a generalized article
@Mahi
ReplyDeletearey yaar! I understood it the moment I saw your comment! But wanted to make myself clear to you!
:)
good one
ReplyDeleteagain you did it beautifully
@Chetan
ReplyDeleteHEy thanks :)
Haha... good suspense story... :P
ReplyDelete@Dharshan
ReplyDeleteHey hi re :)
Welcome back :)
Thanks :P
:P :P
ReplyDeleteu alwaz end sum suspense lyk dis......well a gud one
@TA
ReplyDeleteHeheehehe :P :D
Thanks